anisette shots & a hooker
By FadedBlues
it's late.
the bar's gettin ready to close. the last business suit stumbles
out
the door, after arguing with a girl that he was annoying. she comes
over to me, says got a light? I pick up matches from the bar, fire up
her
virginia slim. I'm in town lookin into a business deal that didn't
pan out.
she's got dark hair, but kind of an Ann Sheridan look to
her. I look at the
bottle she's holding: Colony Grace Anisette.
I ask, does she want to come to my hotel with me. she says what
I expected
her to say: I don't come cheap. I say no problem, let's
go. in the room, she's
real casual, like she owns the place. I don't
like it, so maybe I'll scare her a
little. didn't your mother warn
you about guys like me?
she stays tough. I never had a mother,
& I ran away from my father & the
tramps he shacked up with when
other girls were preparing for 1st communion.
I been runnin ever since,
& I'm tired. I'm real tired. she's got a sad look in her
eyes, the
kind that could bust up a heart as cold as mine.
all I could
do was hold her, hard. she clings, like it's exactly what she wanted
me to do. after a minute she pushes away, goes to the bathroom & gets
two
plastic cups, pours out double shots. I take $200 & put it on
the table.
she undresses slow. the dim light shows me beauty
that would have made me
cry if I was more human. I take off my
clothes, that all of a sudden feel like
sandpaper. in bed, we are
arms & legs & movements made of desperation.
we maybe took a trip
thru heaven, but I don't know, 'cause I wouldn't recognize
heaven
if I had the blueprints. I know that it was never that good before,
& never would be again.
when the night songs & the bottle
were empty, she moved toward the door
as I watched in bed. she said:
don't take no wooden nickels, stranger.
and she was gone.
the money was still on the table.
Comments on "anisette shots & a hooker"
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On Friday, June 7, 2013, BlackVelvet Rose
(175) wrote:
within the loneliness there is always a flower waiting to bloom. she blossomed throughout this and was so much more than a one night stand.... love it baby.
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On Friday, December 21, 2012, midnights voice
(957) wrote:
Loneliness is everywhere desparation is a matchlight away Love is a glance and one quip goodbye.
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On Sunday, November 4, 2012, Nehema
(958) wrote:
Its nice when the seller is open to receive when the goods are delivered so honestly. Sorry I missed this the other, glad I came back & found it - XXOO
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On Saturday, November 3, 2012, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
WOW!!!!!!! wow. i dont know how to comment. thank you faded for sharing such personal things. it inspires me you know that right? which is why i am not afraid. i love you.
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On Saturday, November 3, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Awesome 'Blues. Made me think of an old movie with he cool thought narration. Excellent little story. Cool Later -
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On Friday, November 2, 2012, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
Friends, thanks. a little noir poetry. I can hear Sinatra crooning...
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A former member wrote:
that ending sent chills through me. "I wouldn't recognize heaven if I had the blueprints." this was so resigned and heavy and achingly honest. This is provocative and absolutely captivating. I didn't want it to end. I wanted a happy ending for you both... gorgeous, these moments of frankness when the alcohol only encourages misanthropy and stinging emptiness.... To feel another sometimes only reminds you only of what you're missing.. profound. Is this fiction?
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A former member wrote:
Very nice!! Great job
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On Wednesday, October 31, 2012, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
The title alone drew me in and the piece did not disappoint! Excellent mood created in such a short piece - had the sultry feel of a detective novel. My favourite line is "we maybe took a trip thru heaven, but I don't know, 'cause I wouldn't recognize heaven if I had the blueprints." Great mood and feel to this! Ciao, T/S
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A former member wrote:
Holy cow! This is amazing, I love, love., love it! Thanks for posting it !