" Shooting Star " pt. I feat. Devilish
By Sean Mc Shane
Screen is black . . . Fade into . . .
EXT. TWO-STORY OFFICE BUILDING.
DAY.
The Rise Above Mental Health Services Center, in Pleasant
Valley Somewhere
A beautiful Spring day is darkened by the shadow
of an American Nightmare
The scene is reminiscent of Virginia Tech,
with eerie similarities to Columbine
Another senseless massacre .
. . another psycho-Shooter crosses the line . . .
CUT TO :
INT. OFFICE SUITE 207. SECOND FLOOR. DAY.
The Shooter sits at the desk of a former five-star shrink
Bloody
hands reload his 9mm, while his blood drips like black ink
A small
tv in the corner shows the horrorific scenes outside
He watches what
he has caused, grinning with great dark pride
His gaze shifts from
the tv to the corner on his far right
where Three people cower in
fear, trembling in a wicked fright
He cocks his weapon and aims it
at the Three on the floor
He taps his finger against his lips, They
heed his warning for sure
They bury Their faces into each other, trying
to stifle any sound
The Shooter lowers the gun, in his trenchcoat
he feels around
Outcomes a mini-cassette recorder, he sets on the
desk top
He looks at His blood-soaked hand, knowing the bleeding won't
stop
He flicks his hand and takes the recorder, and again with that
grin
He holds the recorder up, clear his throat and then He begins
. . .
" Ahhh man, well the Big Day is here, always knew it
would come
Phantasizing about it gets old, you know where I'm comin'
from
It was the best way to make my statement, everybody's gonna
listen
All those lost years I hesistated, I never knew what I
was missin'
Do I feel bad about it ? Well, I no longer feel
. . . dead
I actually feel . . . alive, how ironic, with all
this bloodshed
Even my own blood spills today, that cop got off
a lucky shot
so did I, he chose his profession, He deserved what
he got
They ALL got what they deserved, and should thank
me for it
comin' here with their broken mind, hoping for help to
restore it
I was fooled by all that too, talk-talk-talk and take
your medication
no more prolonging my misery, time to meet my final
destination
Runnin' and gunnin' for revenge, giving it all
back to society
Rich Poor Black White whatever, I went for a non-biased
variety
the looks on all those faces, realizing it's this Pariah's
finest hour
more like 15 minutes, to show the world who really
has the power
And all of this could've been avoided, they
shouldn't've doubted me
State cut-backs on whatever funding, all
hope is leavin' without me
That place was my home, I was in and
out for years
alone with no meds, in comes the rage and all of
it's fears
I warned them not to do that, be best if you keep
me locked inside
I was given a 'sorry' and 'good luck', I knew
then, they're all gonna die
Not that I loved that hospital, but
I did fall in love when I was there
with a crazy lil Babydoll from
Hell, the only one I believe really cared
I wonder if She's
in the rec room ? Watchin' this shit on that crap tv ?
wonder
what She's thinkin' ? Wonder what She'd say to me ? . . . "
". . . Oh baby . . . I'm so proud
of you ! . . .
They ain't seen nothin' yet . . . I'll get ya that lawyer . . .
the criminal vet . . . then maybe you'll be here with me . . .
we'll make history . . . with our confessions of pleasure . . .
and what brought us together . . . oh hunny . . .
I'll see ya soon . . . every night under the same moon . . .
I'll howl and maybe growl a lil . . . have sweet dreams of us
in the middle . . . of life's greatest reward . . . the mental ward . .
. "
" She's so fuckin' cool man . . . shit, sucks I'll never
see her again
not in this bullshit world, maybe in some darker
heaven
my little demon-angel, all dressed in wicked black leather
I hope She kills herself soon . . . so we can really be free together
Although most will say I'm goin' to hell, when I lose my last
breath
but that's the moment I leave hell, signed out by the Angel
of death
and this here is far from over, I still have plenty of
vengeance to give
keep on handin' out as much death as I can, while
I still live . . . "
( to be continued )
Author's Note:
Fascinated by them, but I do NOT condoneComments on "" Shooting Star " pt. I feat. Devilish"
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On Sunday, April 1, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Interesting escapist fantasy and glad you are not my mailman! Cheers SMS.
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On Sunday, April 1, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Thanks, d. And no, not the mailman. I'm going with UPS Deliv. You can hold more in their trucks than a goofy little jeep. j/k. Thanks again, later -
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, haunted
(837) wrote:
very nice writting and an excellent collab. i was at that place of being told sorry and good luck and it fucking pissed me off, minus the guns. its a feeling of hopelesness. and you captured the essence of that very well. excellent mcshane and devil!! i cant wait to read your ending and how this ends.
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Thanks, h. It does suck when shrinks can play with your life thru medication(s) and what they deem is best for you. Then, in a blink of an eye . . . you're on your own. I've read a lot about Spree shooters and a good percentage have been chewed up and spit out by mental health services. And thanks for the awesome compliments, for both Dev and I. She is awesome. Thanks again, h. later -
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, Corinthian
(306) wrote:
This is an excellent work and I would really like to read more ...very interesting and well written I'm at work and I found this to be extremely satisfying to read thankyou.
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Thanks, D, for the high compliments. Much apprechiated. And there is a pt II coming soon. Til next time -
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A former member wrote:
Yes!!! Just... Yes!!!
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Thanks, RK. I'm glad you like it. And thanks for the B-Mark. Always cool. later -
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Sweeeeet sean.. More of a movie than most plots i've seen.. thank you sir....
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
I should thank you Dev. This piece may be a gold ring, but you're the diamond in it. Thanks for making this shine. Til next time -
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A former member wrote:
More why do you make parts
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On Saturday, March 31, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
More is coming. And because sometimes I'm a wind-bag. (limited space) Thanks for commenting FTL. later -