Rest for the Wicked
By Sean Mc Shane
SCREEN IS BLACK . . .
Fade in . . . black & white
. . . night surrenders . . . to morning twilight
Abandoned
gas station, Chevy parked behind, Keep out of sight, harder to find
SHE comes out, Goth Glam show, lights a smoke, turns cool and
slow
Walks around back, up to the car, twinkle in her eye, like
a fading star
Behind the wheel, sits her MAN, 1000 yard stare,
into No Man's Land
A passionate kiss, shit-eating-grins, Outlaw
Love, adorned with sins
Up for days, feel death stalking, crawls
in the car, then She's talking
Gun in hand, points to the sky,
cocks the hammer, winks her eye . . .
" Remember us in winter
when we take you down
spark the lower fires
light the Underground,
Our blood trail stretches on
follow it back to us
we'll all go together
get on the big Black Bus,
We'll break the world's surface
come up strong and bleeding
we've swallowed our faith
while temptation was breeding,
We ran thru your existance
misplaced your screaming souls
shattered your shells bloody
with ripping raping holes
No relief no rescue
not for anyone here
so remember us in winter
when Angels ask you about fear "
She lowers the gun, looks
in his eyes, wanting a response, She gets no replies
a long
deep sigh, a subtle frown, she wonders why, lays her head down
Sleep overpowers, they fall under, all their lightning, subsides to thunder
wrapped in their arms, their world's on hold, return tomorrow,
when more unfolds
Rest for the Wicked, no peace to attack, enjoy
the silence, fade back to black . . .
Author's Note:
scene from an R&R scriptComments on "Rest for the Wicked"
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On Monday, March 12, 2012, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
A little Bonnie and Clyde story never hurt anyone, lol. Great write.
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On Tuesday, March 13, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Thanks A. Apprechiate the thumbs up. I also thank you for not refering to Natural Born Killers. B & C are the best, as well as all the other 'real-life' killer couples. Thanks again, later -
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On Tuesday, February 14, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
SMS one stumble on this marvellous piece if I may, she's standing beside the car with gun in hand and pointing up to the sky etc. - then the central verse - followed by she lays her head down. Don't recall when she got in the car or how? Nit picking probably but just a minor tripping point. Really enjoyed this and it was somewhat reminiscent of "Natural Born Killers" but then you had your own crazy lady too as I recall, cheers dude!
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On Tuesday, February 14, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Ey dwells, I didn't think you were nit-picking at all. I agree, with in/out of the car situation. That part drove me crazy (crazier) I was trying to bridge the action, but I didn't want to create another verse just for that. But now I wish I would have. Anyway, as always, I thank you for the cool compliments and spot-on critiques. Please don't ever hesitate to point anything out that doesn't seem to fit. I apprechiate that just as much. Again, thanks, man.
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On Tuesday, February 14, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Simple fix but not really necessary: "she wonders why" could be replaced by "gets in the car" - Cheers!
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On Wednesday, February 15, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Ey dwells, well I guess it did become a necessary fix . . . when it bothered me on and off the entire night. But that's a good thing I guess, should've just fixed it pre-post. Simple, yes. Tweaked, yes. Now I am much happier with it. Again, thanks for the little push to make it more complete. I think you'll dig it.
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On Tuesday, February 14, 2012, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Fucking beautifly written.. Hello there you..
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On Tuesday, February 14, 2012, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Hello there to you too Devilish. Glad you liked it. Based on some of your writings I've read, you strike me as a fellow 'outlaw poet' . Too cool. Thanks again.