Vanity
By Rowan
Painted faces upon silicon stars,
artificial molds skillfully manufactured.
Self conscious beauty disguises scars,
fake smile heals the soul
fractured.
Lovely bones no weight to hang,
thinning elegance
of stick figures.
Insulted mind feels the pang,
reflection of
the disfigured.
Perfection must be achieved,
cut the rough
edges away.
Build your temple and deceive,
yourself you must
learn to sway.
The eye of the beholder rests,
judged by
society's ideals.
Open to what everyone suggests,
what is it
that you feel?
Scalpels carving into the flesh,
peel back
the disgust in your eyes.
Create this body to be flawless,
even
in youth this is advised.
Savor your curves, love your skin,
don't conform to the expected.
Why must you change when,
you were
already perfected?
Author's Note:
This was a challenge between me and my friend, xthexnightlifex. Her poem is also on this subject, named "perfection"Comments on "Vanity"
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful piece, fluid in its thoughts and a remarkable ending, loved the last question, goes two ways... Brilliant.
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A former member wrote:
No one should ever deny themselves of love. No matter what, you're beautiful. I loved this
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A former member wrote:
you did a great job chick. it really is sad how much almost everyone puts into looking perfect
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A former member wrote:
Wow very good visual. I know all about the evil of vanity. Thank you for giving me another perspective :)
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On Sunday, April 4, 2010, lupus tenebrae
(860) wrote:
Excellent write, this is a perfect description of self-obsessed perfection, in a quest to become perfect however, the person then becomes artificial, that's what I got from this, I'd say you won the contest, thanks for sharing.
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A former member wrote:
I love this. It touched me
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A former member wrote:
It spoke miles and miles of truth. Great structure, the last verse wrapped it all up nicely
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, Musik2MyEyes
(192) wrote:
Well written piece. Good subject matter and excellent punch line.
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, ubiquitoussoul
(343) wrote:
Wonderful..My favorite line would have to be the closing one..all this and then boom!Slapped with the truth.
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, Malcholm Dark
(806) wrote:
Well done, what a great concept to write on... The wealthiest doctors in the world are plastic surgeons.... The first line was so perfect, it pulls the reader into the piece... thanks for catching my typo... thank-you for the write
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On Saturday, April 3, 2010, HeadpatSlut
(257) wrote:
I say you win the contest, this way amazing.