Woods of the Suicides

By Rowan

Take thy life, my merciful tragic death,
with this dagger's steel replace my breath.
Steal my sorrows and rewrite my law,
remember my name and God forgive my flaw.

Crimson spills unto blood soaked hands,
waste my soul upon flaming sands.
Into the earth forever chained by shame,
no corpse to possess, given this tree like frame.

Gnarled roots wind their way through hollow ground,
sightless, unmoving, and without any sound,
until blood is shed from wounded bark,
muted souls shall embrace the silent dark.

Blackened branches studded with thorns,
poisonous shards mortal life mourns.
Wilted flowers of venomous stealth,
Intoxicating, overpowering to thine own health.

Never to speak of repentance of mine,
hidden beneath fastening, spiraling vines.
Break my limbs, bleed me dry,
pierce the air with my agonizing cries.

Silently waiting for tormented pain,
to finally use the withered voice once again.
Even in death I am still clearly unheard,
but always through torture whispered words stir.

Sealed by fate, and judged most severe,
chose to leave that great revolving sphere.
Forgiveness rendered, myself to blame,
please God I beg, forget my flawed name!



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Copyright 2010 Rowan
Published on Thursday, April 1, 2010.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Inspired by Dante's The Inferno, and a tribute to Dante Alighieri. Maybe people will think before they decide to take their life...
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  • Queenvampirina On Tuesday, February 5, 2019, Queenvampirina (35)By person wrote:

    Such an amazing ethereal work Good job

  • A former member wrote: Wow, what else is there to say everyone has said everything ITS AMAZING. The words the flow the rhymes! everything just fits together, it truly is a masterpiece!!

  • A former member wrote: This is such amazing work!! I hope to write like this someday...

  • A former member wrote: Goes right to favorites.

  • jajang829 On Wednesday, April 28, 2010, jajang829 (23)By person wrote:

    Terrific imagery and word flow. Truly a fantastic work! Among the best! :)

  • A former member wrote: that was beautiful and very descriptive it's great to know that even today people still read and like The Divine Comedy

  • HeadpatSlut On Saturday, April 3, 2010, HeadpatSlut (262)By person wrote:

    This was amazing, truly a vision in the mind of the act itself, "Gnarled roots wind their way through hollow ground", that's perfection, thanks for the write, wish I could be that good. Scholar

  • Malcholm Dark On Friday, April 2, 2010, Malcholm Dark (823)By person wrote:

    Good god R, that was so dark... every line is a visual ride, you describe a place I don't don't want to go to, well done..."gnarled roots wind their way through hollow ground...Fantastic line, thank-you

  • A Life Without You On Friday, April 2, 2010, A Life Without You (149)By person wrote:

    Very powerful Rowan! 1600's lit style, very well done. You are very talented my friend... "Break my limbs, bleed me dry, pierce the air with my agonizing cries." - one of my favorites

  • jajang829 On Thursday, April 1, 2010, jajang829 (23)By person wrote:

    Fantastic and fascinating. Too many wondrous parts to mention. Had me mesmerized and focused from the very first word. I found myself rushing it the first time thru, my mind rushing to get to each word. Had to read this one many times. Thank you so much for sharing this!

  • ubiquitoussoul On Thursday, April 1, 2010, ubiquitoussoul (347)By person wrote:

    Oh yeah and the imagery in this piece and that of Dante's is very reminiscent to the work of Hieronymus Bosch an early Netherlandish painter...you should check him out..his stuff is so gruesome...very mind boggling.

  • Rowan On Thursday, April 1, 2010, Rowan (205)By person wrote:

    I'll do that right now then. Thanks soul.

  • ubiquitoussoul On Thursday, April 1, 2010, ubiquitoussoul (347)By person wrote:

    Ah yes Rowan..this brought me back to the very scene..I remember it like it was yesterday..Canto XIII-Circle Seven...So people do listen..Dante speaks only true wisdom :P..you suicidal will face this manacled fate..I really enjoyed your gruesome twist on one of the many great morbid scenes found in the inferno..Each stanza was unique..it remained pretty close to the original but with your own words-awesome job on that..the flaming sands...the weeping branches and those tortured suffering souls..Epic fits this poem.,Thanks for the amazing write..

  • Rowan On Thursday, April 1, 2010, Rowan (205)By person wrote:

    It's my favorite part! I could analyze Dante forever...

  • lupus tenebrae On Thursday, April 1, 2010, lupus tenebrae (895)By person wrote:

    Very powerful write, it's well written, every word seemed to shoot through me like hot lead, and some deadly imagery, too many good lines to name, well done, thanks for sharing. Scholar

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