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Discount Love
By aCiD aNgEL
You werent the prize
youll never amount
he just used you, for the discount
and the price you paid
wasnt enough
for the way that he, made you feel rough
ten percent love
ninety percent lust
sacraficing for him, was a must
You werent the prize
you never amounted
he just used you for your love was discounted
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A former member wrote:
i seriously am to the point that i have it memorized
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A former member wrote:
i never knew what words to say. i read it alot. it is one of my favorites yet i never knew what to say, so ill say this, i love it
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On Monday, March 29, 2010, mysterylove
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wrote:
i was excited to see that you wrote something new! =) and yeah i love thisss very powerful read. its like w.h.o.a.
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On Monday, March 29, 2010, ubiquitoussoul
(343) wrote:
short,simple and blunt! I liked how it punches you in the face with the message.The rhyming was cool.."discount love"-it was so fitting..Thanks for the read.
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On Monday, March 29, 2010, Malcholm Dark
(806) wrote:
Very cool, a great write... I had a bit of a problem with flow... and only because you cram words together with no commas... last line between 'you' and 'for'... it will help the reader a lot.. I like your poem, write on....
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