Untitled

By Bloodofdeadpoets

I can feel my brain pleading
With my lungs to start breathing
With my heart to start beating
With my soul to stop yearning
With my eyes to stop burning
With my blood to start flowing
With my emotions to start showing
With my spirit to start glowing
But still I sit here not knowing
What it really wants or needs
So my life slowly concedes
To the hollowness of Death


All comments are greatly appreciated, thanks for reading

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Copyright 2003 bloodofdeadpoets
Published on Tuesday, May 13, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: I cannot explain how well written it is, so I'm just gonna say, read the previous comments and you'll get the idea. Love it ^.^

  • thelostmessenger On Thursday, May 10, 2007, thelostmessenger (112)By person wrote:

    it screams of emotion... it's very flowing and interesting to read

  • Enigma On Wednesday, April 4, 2007, Enigma (91)By person wrote:

    I agree with all the comments others have posted....Great write.

  • InsipidTouch On Tuesday, May 31, 2005, InsipidTouch (32)By person wrote:

    That is completely amazing... I love it.

  • Emptyness Inside Me On Sunday, February 29, 2004, Emptyness Inside Me (171)By person wrote:

    great write, i love fast paced works good job ~Emptyness~

  • KittyStryker On Monday, September 1, 2003, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    this makes me manic... i fel anxious reading it. breathes fast before the end. interesting...

  • A former member wrote: That flowed so nicely. And I don't know about anyone else but it sped up the farther I went and then just a sudden stop. I really do like you style.

  • A former member wrote: Like all of your works before, its absolutly amazing, I have told you once and I will tell you again you are my favorite!

  • Bloodofdeadpoets On Tuesday, May 13, 2003, Bloodofdeadpoets (55)By person wrote:

    thanks alone your comments are always appreciated, thanks you very much

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