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hyperventilation
By freudian-slip
To be wrapped
pretzel twisted
around your skin
knowing
my fingertips
are the only part of me
not able to feel
for it seems
their one and only function
is to trace the lining of your soul
knowing nothing else at that moment
but the depth
of your breathing
into the part of me
that wants to be screaming
holy shit this is so fucking god damn everything
and when carbon dioxide
takes the place
of oxygen
it only intensifies
how much
I love you inside of me
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© 2008 the-rapist
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On Thursday, January 14, 2010, Dilated View
(582)
wrote:
Hypnotic, sounds like your own paradise. Loved the way you worded this. Very much enjoyed, thank you for sharing.
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A former member wrote:
Everyone has felt this once. Familiar, and very real.
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On Saturday, October 4, 2008, sixsixnine
(476) wrote:
Very cool piece... I must say this makes me want to... anyway great write
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On Saturday, October 4, 2008, The Lipstick Factor
(287) wrote:
The first two lines really reeled me in. Well worth reading. Very passionate write.
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A former member wrote:
A kick ass piece of emotional outwardness, and once again the reality you bring to your writes puts you in a documentary state, .. face to face with daily dilemmas that haunt, frustrate, and entice the human physce.
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On Saturday, October 4, 2008, Leith Plunkett
(237) wrote:
intense. I feel overwhelmed just reading it. nice read :-)
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