looking out

By swing_the_hammer

cars are circling around the block,
to watch me on the porch.
watch me smoking on the porch,
i am locking all the doors,
they are coming 'round again

i am sitting on the couch,
sitting on the couch, it has no legs,
it just sits on the floor
and the time doesn't move, no it doesn't
move like it used to before

in my brain there is a twinge,
it makes me fidget in my sleep,
yeah i keep talking through my dreams
but i don't know what it means
they are coming 'round again

i am choking on my water,
trying to keep my breath in check,
but i was like a lamb, led to the
valley of the shadow of
the midwest

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© 2007 swing_the_hammer
Published on Friday, August 24, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Six-Out On Friday, August 24, 2007, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    I loved the ending. You have a way of making me wish I wrote some of the ideas you came up with. Good job.

  • blue On Friday, August 24, 2007, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    =) I suck at commentary, but this rocks!! I too am the mid-west lamb, but I wasn't led, I was unfortunately born into it. Oop. Thanks for the smile. ~b

  • swing_the_hammer On Friday, August 24, 2007, swing_the_hammer (48)By person wrote:

    i was born into it as well... southeast kansas. L

  • serotonin lost On Friday, August 24, 2007, serotonin lost (140)By person wrote:

    scattered.... and flows at the same time.. i couldn't turn away until i at least partually understood this.. well done, you held my attention.

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