Comments by Trigger
- "The last 2 lines are, for me, the best. This was a good piece. It has a cool meloncholy to it, with a taste of pain. This is nice. Keep it up."
Posted by Trigger on "Dawn's Breeze" by Lawless Fighter
- "This is the only Shakespearian sonnet I've seen on this site, other than my own. This was good, they're tricky things, but this was good, you know your stuff."
Posted by Trigger on "Brightly" by jack paper
- "Knowing you, I expected to look at this and find nothing, a blank page with a title, but this was a really fun write, despite the couple spelling errors. It is almost a parody written on writing itself, nice."
Posted by Trigger on "The Blank Paper" by Lawless Fighter
- "I like Darkness as a pronoun. This is good, better than the origanal, I think. My favourite line was 16, that was good. And I'm still loving the concept. Darkness as a lover... hmm..."
Posted by Trigger on "Darkness Still Loves Me" by Lawless Fighter
- "I'll be honest... the title made me think "EMO!" And then I remembered, you hate emo. This is a good piece throughout. The theme is very interesting, darkness as a lover... hmm..."
Posted by Trigger on "Darkness Loves Me" by Lawless Fighter
- "The ending made me smile. This worries me... but you have a good piece here, the ending almost reminds me of 'Heirate Mich.' My only complaints were a couple of grammatical errors, but other than that, a good piece."
Posted by Trigger on "As you sleep" by Lawless Fighter
- "There wasn't really much imagery, but it worked quite well in this circumstance. I like the journy that was taken through this prose."
Posted by Trigger on "Disconnect Yourself." by Ozymandias
- "I echo veingo, also, a very interesting portreyal of such a subject. Very well done. I am sorry for whatever inspired it."
Posted by Trigger on "childhood curse..." by GraveFlower
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