Heartless, Ceaseless

By Rhys Ki

You promised me forever;
I guess forever’s come and gone.
It’s hard to tell, even now,
But you think I’m in the wrong.

Who are you to judge, though,
When all I gave you was love?
Even in the brightest day, I helped
When you weren’t tough enough.

You accuse me of heartlessness
And say you want to leave,
But why can’t you see my heart will sing
Even though it’s still just trying to beat?

You say that you’d rather
Die (of course!)
Because even that would be better
Than loving a corpse.


Just know that after you’re gone,
And I’m lost in my eternal night,
Remembering the pain, I swear to God,
I’ll think of you every time I bite.

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© 2007 Rhys Ki
Published on Friday, May 25, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Eric On Friday, September 26, 2008, Eric (77)By person wrote:

    Love this. Great write.

  • A former member wrote: Hey not bad for someone that says their poetry needs work! :) some that don't think theirs does could take lessons... :)

  • A former member wrote: This was a cold hard shock of reality. You don't mince words, do you? Well done, dear. Welcome to DP.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Thursday, June 7, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    Yeah yeah yeah. :P we have seen it all here. But this is a fresh breeze of air. Glad you are here to share your words with us

  • SalemLex On Wednesday, May 30, 2007, SalemLex (25)By person wrote:

    hands down my favorite part is the ending line. dont know if you mean how i'm taking it but i think this is great anyway

  • Templer On Tuesday, May 29, 2007, Templer (22)By person wrote:

    Can't say I have experienced this but I have had some stuff come quite damn close. Keep it up and give us more.

  • Grim_Sorrow On Monday, May 28, 2007, Grim_Sorrow (74)By person wrote:

    The premise is good, and it starts off quite well but it seems to lose its rhythm abruptly towards the end, if you could only smooth the transition,just my opinion, but all in all I'd say you have great potential and I look forward to future works.

  • Rhys Ki On Tuesday, May 29, 2007, Rhys Ki (68)By person wrote:

    Thank you, Grim. I know I need to work on my poetry. I hope to finish a short story I am writing soon. Do read. You are my first friend. Love, Jessica.

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