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thirteen teeth
By swing_the_hammer
he says
i love you.
both and i need to know
which one
most so off he goes
to decide
yes or no yes
or no
.
.
i said
i'll leave you.
though i can't love
you unless
you just
let me know
which one is best
no or yes no
or yes
.
.
my
old heart is
the one i was given
but damn
this thing
can't keep
any rhythm
there's so
much hurt
a blank address
which one more
which one less
i will not
rest my heart
low in my chest
i can always
go just say
yes or no
yes or
no
.
if you love
me please
just tell me
dear or i'll pack up
my stuff and
get out of
here
.
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On Monday, April 23, 2007, capt_funguy
(777)
wrote:
dug the playful appproach, it reads itself to you ... like pulling daisy petals - loves me/loves me not ... you'll only matter if you want to ... great stuff ... funguy
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A former member wrote:
i thought i had commented on this before, but i guess not. i really enjoyed reading this..i love the form and the sentiment. it definetly painted a picture for me..beautifully done.
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On Monday, April 16, 2007, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
this.is brutal. fuck that. you're stronger.
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On Monday, April 16, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
you never cease to amaze me.
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On Saturday, April 14, 2007, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
simple, but still enigmatic... hmmm...
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On Saturday, April 14, 2007, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
yeah, now that i know what this is about, parts make much more sense... and the whole is all the more brilliant... well done, as usual.
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