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They told me I paid my debt to society, I laughed.
By Dr Benway
I can't believe I am standing here again,
trying to clear it all from my mind,
waiting, wishing for it to burn itself away.
I was never suppose to be like this,
This was never part of our deal.
"Ok I've learned my lesson,
You've made your point,
now please let me go home!"
Back then I painted a golden landscape,
and wrote of a fantastic mind fuck.
These days I forget my own middle name,
and yesterday they came to take my car.
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Copyright 2005 Rustedfaith
Published on Friday, January 21, 2005.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "They told me I paid my debt to society, I laughed."
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On Tuesday, January 9, 2007, flying_fox
(571)
wrote:
wow - talk about hard-hitting words. The gentle beginning makes the ending all the more powerful. great write.
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On Saturday, September 30, 2006, Dei
(663) wrote:
Oh god. . . that last stanza was amazing. kudos
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On Tuesday, May 9, 2006, Elegant Kiss
(178) wrote:
I always come around and hope you've peeped in.. It saddens me greatly. I worry about you too much.
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On Wednesday, January 11, 2006, TaintedButterfly
(653) wrote:
It read to me like you were gonna just give up but something kept you going anyway, despite losing it all. That's how I read it. I liked this a LOT! Awesome.
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On Saturday, April 23, 2005, Trichotillomaniac
(42) wrote:
I enjoyed the last line, it made it laugh. I'm sorry if this wasn't your intent.
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On Thursday, March 31, 2005, A Velvet Tongue
(434) wrote:
life sucks rat shit and then we must face the fire and walk on coals...hardly seems fair..but this write is honest..and that is what I love about you...Muah
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On Thursday, February 10, 2005, Zara Synn
(57) wrote:
I really liked this...especially the first two lines of the last stanza. I'm glad to see you have the power to take horrible life experiences and turn them into beautiful words.
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A former member wrote:
haha! i really liked this, but one thing i want to point out... "dept" is spelled with a b. ive also had some issues with previous accounts. i just started up again today. good luck! it looks like you dont need it though...
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On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, Dr Benway
(48) wrote:
Thanks, I missed that, only bothered spell checking the poem, not the title :)
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A former member wrote:
Very wow. This really defines this bitchiness of life.
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On Saturday, January 29, 2005, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
direct, straight to the point, original and interesting write. nice work
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A former member wrote:
i like how you just got to the fucking point on this one by the way you were right about the poem of mine you commented on
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On Saturday, January 29, 2005, sIo
(898) wrote:
i agree with phant-this was an interesting and truly original piece.
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On Sunday, February 13, 2005, sIo
(898) wrote:
i have to say...reading this again i don't understand it...one....bit...
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On Wednesday, January 26, 2005, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
Very interesting write... the nonsequitur taste of the last stanza really pulled it together. There's something very harsh and raw about how you write, almost as if you're vomiting up your words; choking on them, but feeling better after for it.
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A former member wrote:
This was a great poem.
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On Friday, January 21, 2005, call to arms
(31) wrote:
The last 2 lines are devestating, but they pull this together soooo nicely. This as a wonderfully written piece.
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On Friday, January 21, 2005, call to arms
(31) wrote:
I just re-read this and decided that I am in love with it. ::adds to favorites::
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On Friday, January 21, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(917) wrote:
sad....but we make our own decisions in life...nice write. ~A
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On Friday, January 21, 2005, Emptyness Inside Me
(171) wrote:
damn that must suck, great write ~Emptyness~
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On Friday, January 21, 2005, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
It's a bitch, ain't it?
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On Friday, July 29, 2005, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
I still love this this.
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