Hidden Little Girl
By JiNx
Notice The girl hidden by broken images
She's fragile and empty
Look into her eyes, see how she ages
There are so many scars you can't see
See how her mind works
But be wary of what you find
and be cautious of the memories
For they were never kind
Watch out for her piercing cries
Don't hide from her broken soul
Watch as she slowly dies
Her eyes becoming empty and cold
Don't dare enter her heart
It's full of hollow cracks
But go on discover her art
See what it lacks
Look see her scars deep with in
Watch as she shivers and hurts
See her as you sin
She suffers and screams
Her face quivers from fear
Pale and emotionless
A little girl hidden in here
Inside shes a tainted mess
She's torn and distant
You won't be able to understand
Try to reach her, you can't
Comfort her hold her trembling hand
Save her before she's to far away
Can you see me?
Can you touch me, save me from the dismay?
Will you help me to be?
Feel my hollow despair
Please excuse my cracks
Help me, please care!
Watch my broken images
Don't let me slip and fade away
Stop watching me slowly die
Listen to what I must say
Forgive my empty, tormenting cry
For I am hollow and unpure
Theres nothing left of me to be
To tainted for you to cure
Please notice me, just look and see...
Comments on "Hidden Little Girl"
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On Wednesday, December 29, 2004, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
so far, this is my favorite of yours . . it speaks complete honesty, and both weakness and strength at the same time. . lovely work :)
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On Wednesday, December 29, 2004, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
"Watch out for her piercing cries", this line was nice. . as very many others in this piece. another part that really stood out was "Don't dare enter her heart It's full of hollow cracks But go on discover her art See what it lacks". . such beauty
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A former member wrote:
beautiful. amazing. true. i dont know what to say. those are just some words to describe this. excellent.
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On Thursday, November 18, 2004, Lord Kalgalath
(182) wrote:
=gets out the heart spackle= we'll have those cracks repaired soonly. We be your friends, we care. excellent write.
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On Tuesday, November 16, 2004, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
This was beautiful, and yet painful at the same time *cuddles* great write love ~Elise
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On Monday, November 15, 2004, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
This ripped my heart out, you brought out the beauty in one's pain and made it real...exquisite write Kya
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On Monday, November 15, 2004, Savannah
(218) wrote:
beautiful.. I'm not very good at commenting, but that is what it is.. just beautiful
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A former member wrote:
that is very touching beautiful and emotional write
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A former member wrote:
yes very painful but inspiring good to know others can go where most people wont look.
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On Monday, November 15, 2004, mysticventures
(527) wrote:
good write and painful too! You must remember though - no one is unpure!!!
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On Monday, November 15, 2004, Nesfurata
(58) wrote:
Wow, the pain and torment expressed in this is almost more then I can handle. I really like how you switched from third person to first person. An absolutely wonderful write -Elizabeth