.l.i.e.s.

By FindAgentX

why can't i concentrate?
.l.i.e.s.
whatever happened to that little girl?

asleep on the tiles

were they red or white first?

doesn't matter. she's gone like the faded melody./

wish you could've been there, instead of him..

holding her hand.. singing her to sleep.



instead of him beating her head against the tiles

her hands fluttered like birds

and he thought he was doing her a favor..



her hands and feet against the tile

flopping like fish

..drowning in air.

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Copyright 2004 FindAgentX
Published on Sunday, March 14, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • BetaWolfinVA On Sunday, September 30, 2012, BetaWolfinVA (795)By person wrote:

    very well done... shattering Scholar

  • Gray Vision On Sunday, October 2, 2011, Gray Vision (425)By person wrote:

    This was an amazing read, it's always good to get a different perspective on a subject I've written on myself. Anyways, thank you very much for sharing this with us take care =)

  • Jonas On Saturday, September 27, 2008, Jonas (720)By person wrote:

    dark poetry, truly. thank you for this piece of life.

  • TaintedButterfly On Tuesday, February 14, 2006, TaintedButterfly (670)By person wrote:

    Wow, just wow!! Each line held it's own pain, it's own hurt. Amamzing. Julia~

  • BeautifulCalamity On Wednesday, December 8, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428)By person wrote:

    "her hands fluttered like birds". . . damn, this hurt. ripped my heart out. . completely and scratched at it with jagged nails. AMAZING work on this one, i'm completely feeling this. . pain. .

  • A former member wrote: very loose style, though effective. hard to discern the meaning, but several ideas come to mind, each more potent then the last.

  • sulkylime On Monday, April 26, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    thoughts and images

  • sulkylime On Monday, April 26, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    i'm glad red wolf commented because i agree, but i like it bc it's like a vague memory.. recollection of fleeting lost thoughts, or search for something that leads and links to another and another.. and in effect it creates a myriad of subtle/provoking th

  • Exodus On Sunday, March 14, 2004, Exodus (172)By person wrote:

    very interesting....i like this...

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