my above
By manunkind
lying on the ground
a smooth round stone
as small as the world
as large as alone
hide away in the shadows
piercing eyes light up the darkness
poison tears....
...burn a hole through the ground
i am lost
and i
NEVER
want to be found
my savior, the night
the shadows, the darkness
my bane, the day
the too bright sun
im finished with you
it's all over, i'm done
love like smoke
ive seen it
but never felt it
love like smoke
so decieving
love like smoke
tricked me into believing
lying on the ground
a smooth round stone
as small as the world
as large as alone
flee to the darkness
my mind
my home
lying on the ground
a smooth white stone
my blood like blossoms,
like diamonds my bones
fling away this heavy veil
toss away the prison skin
flee to a place
neither fake
nor real
the betraying smoke
the hurtful love
i flee from you
to my shadows
my above
Comments on "my above"
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On Saturday, August 27, 2005, glasshouse
(530) wrote:
"as small as the world as large as alone" amazing. simply amazing. Brilliant indeed. -Glass
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On Thursday, December 18, 2003, unusual_blood
(74) wrote:
"like diamonds my bones" liked how you worded this one. (sentence and poem) The 4th stanza is insanly ingeniously brillant. (if THAT'S even possible!) I NEVER want to be found in my above either
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On Thursday, December 11, 2003, -Oz-
(131) wrote:
i love your choice of words!!....~YeStErDaY~
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A former member wrote:
I really like this, the pictures it summons forth in my mind are astounding-well done-Ashes
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A former member wrote:
Ooh...how did I miss this one? I love the rhythm. I flowed right through it. Very beautiful.
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On Monday, December 8, 2003, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
i thought i'd commented already! (losing mind) Excellent work. I've read it several times now and fully expect I'll do so again. :) purr
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On Monday, December 8, 2003, sweetambrosia
(80) wrote:
Wow! That is really all I can say. The imagery in here is incredible, as is the comparisons made. "as large as alone", I love that! Good job.
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On Monday, December 8, 2003, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
After reading this peice, I find myself at a loss for words. you've got talent. this poem is now a fav. I'm gonna go look into more of your works. Great job!