Woman of My Dreams (Alternate, originally intended version)

By megaprime81

Her eyes glow like phantoms
In the ephemeral void of night
Green and radiant
Dazzling emeralds
Of shade and pure delight
A sparkling jewel
As no man has ever seen
Sheer poetry in motion
As always, like a dream
She is sweet and hot
Burning brighter than the sun
Her fangs dig deep into my neck
As I sigh in pleasure
This, my dream come true
As she draws the blood so treasured

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Published on Wednesday, September 3, 2014. Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

There is another, slightly different version that I'd like to post as well, which was actually the first version I wrote. This, however, was how I initially intended it to be.

Comments on "Woman of My Dreams (Alternate, originally intended version)"

On Wednesday, September 3, 2014, blue angel (866) wrote:

very nice crafting! ten from me.
On Friday, September 5, 2014, megaprime81 (740) wrote:

Thank you. Glad you like it. :-)
On Wednesday, September 3, 2014, TheAmazingCagedOne (20) wrote:

Simply beautiful!
On Wednesday, September 3, 2014, megaprime81 (740) wrote:

Thank you. I hope the ending turned out like I was aiming for, which was the element of surprise.
On Wednesday, September 3, 2014, SickSanityJenn (250) wrote:

I like this a lot. Seductive with a twist of dark
On Wednesday, September 3, 2014, megaprime81 (740) wrote:

Thank you.I appreciate the kind words.