ride lonesome
By FadedBlues
fairy tales end, & there comes a time
when a poem is broken if it doesn’t rhyme
& the mystery of love is never what it seems.
so you pack up the truck with the last of your luck
& you ride. you ride lonesome, guided by a doubtful star
hungry & half-drunk on your own dreams.
there’s a mountain behind you, & the raindrops remind you
of the woman who cried when you kissed her goodbye& the tears that are yet to be shed.
you could write a book with the punches you took
mistakes that were made & the vows left unpaid
but the stories are better off dead.
your heart is a stone. destination unknown
you’re cashing your time on handouts & crime
& you can’t find a hooker when you need one.
your passion’s run dry & your pride is a lie
the curse of your name is whispered in shame
& Alone – is the chain of your freedom.
Comments on "ride lonesome"
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On Monday, June 16, 2014, Clydes_Bonnie
(53) wrote:
I have read this atleast 100 times. It still is one of my favourite. Thanks xo
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On Tuesday, August 9, 2016, Clydes_Bonnie
(53) wrote:
Im back again.
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On Wednesday, November 20, 2013, Sketso
(416) wrote:
Just enough rhythm to make the stark avoidance of rhyme stand out and punch the point home. Arfully played.
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A former member wrote:
With a few tweaks, it would make a great song.
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A former member wrote:
This poem might, indeed, be broken if not for that rhyme...I love rhyme-unrhyme if done right. You've nailed it. Powerful lines, I think you should have been a lyricist. Fully felt, the emotions uncovered here.
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On Wednesday, April 10, 2013, M Morgan
(198) wrote:
Incredibly honesty and so simple!!! The words just flow! BelÃssimo Poeta!!
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On Tuesday, April 9, 2013, closermike
(7) wrote:
Amazing, opens my eyes and makes me think
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On Monday, April 8, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
Friends, thanks, there is a lonely graveyard somewhere where all those stories are laid to rest...
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On Monday, April 8, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
One of your best John, you just kinda summed it all up nice and tidy though there is nothing nice and tidy about it. Life is messy and the human condition keeps it from being simple. Love your work man, simply beautiful - XXOO
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A former member wrote:
Remarkable poetic depth and reason.
As always your words are well taking in.
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On Monday, April 8, 2013, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
Very lyrical. A great ending to the torment felt in this piece. So self resigning in its feel. X
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On Sunday, April 7, 2013, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Excellent FB. I remember many solo runs with these thoughts rollin' around. One of your best for sure. Cool. Later -
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On Sunday, April 7, 2013, Star
(879) wrote:
the second stanza is so powerful that it took my breath away at a single glance... it also reminds me of a song i heard once.... damn blues, this is beautiful (:
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A former member wrote:
"but the stories are better off dead." damn. this is powerful. i think i'd rather not be free. you really know how to sink your teeth in and find the muscle. i hope your wanderings aren't completely bereft of smiles.