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Sea Salt
By Dei
I have this theory that when I came into this world
my soul rode upon a metaphor meteor
and as I burst through the atmosphere
pieces of me scattered everywhere.
Everywhere and Everywhere.
The ocean waved and caught the better parts of me.
So that on moonlit nights and rainy days
You could feel haunted by my presence
while digging your toes into the sands.
and you thought that glass could be your telescope
looking through the tipped up bottom for angels to appear.
While i drowned with every change in tide
and tried desperately. lucklessly. to catch you in undertow.
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Copyright 2013 Nefarious
Published on Thursday, February 21, 2013.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Author's Note:
Part 1 of the Sea-riesAwards
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On Friday, September 6, 2013, the Id
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wrote:
You seem fond of your own sense of love unrequited. I don't blame you, since it serves you so well.
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On Saturday, May 4, 2013, Sasha_Revengy
(48) wrote:
amazing, well deserved
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On Saturday, May 4, 2013, carlosjackal
(3015) wrote:
Had to log in after seeing this get Poem Of The Day...Bloody well deserved..Superb piece :)
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A former member wrote:
i canthe the flow of your work.....very nice
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A former member wrote:
that last stanza is utterly flawless. well done and congrats on potd. i probably wouldn't have come upon this piece otherwise.
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A former member wrote:
...keep having those conversations.
Adroit with the quill...
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A former member wrote:
This piece crashes like the ocean itself. Flawless.
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On Tuesday, February 26, 2013, carlosjackal
(3015) wrote:
This is wonderful, gorgeous stuff..Love it.
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On Monday, February 25, 2013, Ravenblade
(313) wrote:
I can't begin to find words for this, but if I had to I would say that this flowed nicely, and the pictures you paint with your words feel almost at peace until you twist it away at the end. Your yin should have yanged...
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On Saturday, February 23, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(795) wrote:
The last stanza is beatiful, sounds like the one that this is about did a lot of drinking and left you to deal with the consequences? Parent or Husband, or Significant other?
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On Friday, February 22, 2013, dwells
(4285) wrote:
Tremendous metaphor with the telescope and the empty drink glass! Love to dig my toes in the sandy bottom when I go clamming. Enjoyed this piece on several levels, thanks Natelle!
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful imagery.
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