Sparrow
By veingo
When choosing optimism one must commit,
It simply has to last forever.
The joy and pain must bend to fit,
so then the two can not
be severed.
For once perfection came to me.
Most would
have faught to hold on tight.
But no soul loves, unless it's
free.
So here I am, alone tonight.
I saw a pretty sparrow
bird;
it's feathers black, like deep remores.
Against the
snow it looked absurd.
This made me think of you, of course.
The children never say your name,
or mention you like other girls.
They see that this time I'm in pain.
A piece is missing in
my world.
When every night I walk in here,
I hope to find
you standing there.
Perhaps with your eyes glazed in tears.
Needing me once more, to care.
Oh Sparrow, that remorse is
mine,
and shame for what I didn't do.
I pray God, send
me back in time..
I should have said, " I love you too".
.......
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Comments on "Sparrow"
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On Sunday, July 15, 2012, Maladroit
(198) wrote:
This is how my creeping becomes productive.. At first I wanted this in a picture frame.. But by the end, I found myself relating too much. I only like lies in picture frames. I really loved this.
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A former member wrote:
"The children never say your name, or mention you like other girls." that plus the ending..so heartbreaking yet beautiful. I love you.
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On Wednesday, June 27, 2012, TaintedButterfly
(653) wrote:
You just made me cry.... I so KNOW that feeling, and not saying those words that the other person desperately needs to hear. What an emotional write.... wow V. Just beautiful in it's sadness.
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A former member wrote:
.....that was beatiful
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A former member wrote:
Almost made me cry, how wonderful to share these emotions the reader actually feels what you feel. I hope to write this well someday - thanks for sharing!
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A former member wrote:
This is beautiful... The ending was what gave me shivers, but through my body they went and it was great. Thank you for this.
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A former member wrote:
Very amazing write. the ending really did it,.
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On Thursday, April 12, 2012, Aunty Depressant
(423) wrote:
Makes me think of the story where the sparrow bleeds into the rose...and the smitten was still struck down.
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A former member wrote:
"No Soul loves unless its free" I love this. This poem is is Amazing V. Reminds me of my Poe days. Great Job. ][ ][
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A former member wrote:
Regrets and rhetoric unsaid. You spoke them aloud and melancholied. Time can circle back ya know? Pretty write.
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On Sunday, March 4, 2012, Cant walk away
(30) wrote:
you did it again V. I love this. the last line really set the emotion into full speed. I know that feeling all too well! Great write Always, A.
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On Saturday, March 3, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Solemn proclamation and exquisitely expressed emotions, much thanks.