She was a pretty little thing
By With love_Crow
She's a pretty little thing, slender in her form
Grim like the reaper,
an open eyed sleeper
Walking through the thickets, vines thorn andÂ
wicked
From the tree tops hung her noose, old and worn
She
steps out of her shell, this lovely creature
Wearing a white dress
stained with unpleasant dreams
Her breath is drawn and heavy, a bit
unsteady
Wary that her corpse can find strength to breathe
Hair untamed, ebony in color
Eyes an enigma, revealing windowless
panes
She fell for a deceiver, a classic web weaver
Playing with
her heart like a childish game
His touch was unforgiving, his
voice too alluring
And where winter meets the borders of spring
He attracted flames just to snuff it out
Crushing dandelions while
he merrily sang
She was a pretty young thing, radiating light
While he cracked open her soul like sunflower seeds
He tossed them
to the wind to his red eyed friends
Knocking on her door with a bouquet
of weeds
He is a dark raven, the right hand of Satan
Taking
all he could and offering her nothing
But he did make sure to taint
what was once pure
And thought that perhaps that had to count for
something
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Comments on " She was a pretty little thing "
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A former member wrote:
The twist of this was something subtle in a way I didn't quite see it until I read the tags. Then I had to reread the poem in a different light. At first it was darkly beautiful to me, then tragic.
But still very well penned. I like this. I liked this a lot. Everything flowed very well from stanza to stanza, and your imagery was spot on. Even with the subject matter, it was...a gorgeous kind of rotting.
Thank you very much for sharing. Pretty little things are always the most captivating, aren't they?
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On Thursday, March 1, 2012, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...tall, dark & handsome & a predator...this somewhat reminds me of Cummings' 'Tumbling-hair'...
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On Monday, January 9, 2012, The_Broken_Fox_2112
(70) wrote:
Awe-struck. Bookmarking. NOW! Thank you for posting. It's beautiful, but such a chilling ending.
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On Saturday, November 26, 2011, dwells
(4177) wrote:
You remind me of a trial member of a different name I can't recall, a few months back perhaps? Really enjoy reading your stuff, thanks.
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On Saturday, November 26, 2011, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
And I say DAMN!! Crow im impressed !! Each stanza is a hit! The ryhme is brilliant.. Hold on let me resite my favorite part... Eyes an enigma, revealing windowless panes... She feel for a deceiver, a classic web weaver... Beautiful!!!