I take it back
By freudian-slip
-You are so fucking immature Gina
these words and so many others
equal in strength
as they are in poisonous content
ring continuous
and still I fight to swallow back my own vomit
when I picture
the same lips
that once effortlessly
ran themselves
over my skin
and each breath that escaped them
would fill my heart
with nothing less than
poetry
remember that moment
when I finally had the nerve
to hold up my head
to whisper
I love you too
well I take it back
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© 2008 the-rapist
Published on Sunday, May 4, 2008.
Filed under: "Reflective" and
"Poetry"
Comments on "I take it back"
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A former member wrote:
Beautifully written... took my breath away, in fact. Thank you for this piece. :)
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On Monday, May 5, 2008, freudian-slip
(236) wrote:
no eye of the storm, just thinking about how immature I can be. O.k., I take that back too...lol
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On Monday, May 5, 2008, Any
(39) wrote:
God, thanks for the inspiration!
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A former member wrote:
I just wonder if this has been written before the dust has settled, it has feeling of "eye of the storm", really enjoyed it, felt as though I over heard a heated conversation.
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On Monday, May 5, 2008, The Lipstick Factor
(287) wrote:
Beautiful and sad...I really. really liked this
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A former member wrote:
funny how of all the things that can last so long, that can burn themselves into one's memory indelibly, that can haunt and worm their way into the fabric and foundations of every passionate tapestry and future architectural triumph, hurtful words from the beloved can be as damaging as anything. And that is what I feel this expresses well; the last line as well as the first sealing the gentility of the middle into an envelope of utter contempt.
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A former member wrote:
wonderful and yet heartbreaking.
I'm lost for words. ~ hdb.
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On Sunday, May 4, 2008, saturatedloneliness6
(7) wrote:
i agree with you. this is very good.
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On Sunday, May 4, 2008, veingo
(526) wrote:
This was a sledge hammer to the gut. Thanks for sharing. ^V^
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A former member wrote:
ouch. strong and cutting, i likes it ^_^