oscillating like the northern atlantic winds

By totaltrip

smoke fading up to the sky
ashes consumed down to the ground
always an outward smiling disposition
a constant inward sullen adversity
an unwaivering devotion to him
a full awareness of the solitude
hope lost somewhere along that lull
between what dreams are made of right before drifting off to sleep
and the reality of it when awake

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© 2008 totaltrip
Published on Friday, January 18, 2008.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Mari On Monday, April 21, 2008, Mari (419)By person wrote:

    i like your writing/

  • Taunting The Reaper On Friday, January 18, 2008, Taunting The Reaper (169)By person wrote:

    Vivid imagery with a well developed sense of longing.

  • NikesRain On Friday, January 18, 2008, NikesRain (1240)By person wrote:

    familiar images and all too familiar feel... elegantly expressed... it was painful but done with a softer edge... well done

  • A former member wrote: the contrasting ideas and imagery work really well. especially lines 3 & 4. nice work!

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