Comments by stormtalk
- "The beginning of this represented some of the better poetry I've ever read. The rest was variously excellent, too, but the first 7 lines are just plain gold. Very well done, Poet."
Posted by stormtalk on "rain- [a painted cascade]" by Six-Out
- "Jon, my friend... every plane, given enough flights, will crash and burn... but it takes a survivor to fly again... you'll be alright. We both will, eh? ;)"
Posted by stormtalk on "[crash&burn]" by Six-Out
- "there... now that i've laid claim to this piece... i can comment freely. beautiful use of metaphor, alliteration, rhyme, punctuation... one of my favorite reads in quite a while... good work you two"
Posted by stormtalk on "Circle Yes or No" by Six-Out
- ""I know the pieces fit/ Cause I watched them fall away..." this makes me sing Tool's Schism to myself... always a good sign"
Posted by stormtalk on "[life] as.art" by Six-Out
- "This one would make a kickass Bright Eyes song. I like the Goliath analogy, the "mosaic mistress" line, and the shadowy romantic undertones. I'm not sure I like the punctuation as much as the rest."
Posted by stormtalk on "David & Goliath" by Six-Out
- "Manual spinal taps and soul coolatas... this is like a party in my nightmares."
Posted by stormtalk on "poetry." by Six-Out
- "with their soteriology of escape from the cycle through wisdom and their remaining in it out of compassion for other beings who have not yet escaped (in Mahayana Buddhism, anyway, Theravada skips this part). But anyway... awesome work! And happy b-day!"
Posted by stormtalk on "travel the disaster [there's always tomorrow]" by Six-Out
- "Very awesome write. The lines Armand indicated, the fourth line, and the last line were particularly impressive. Great job... kick ass... but don't forget to let it go in the end ;)"
Posted by stormtalk on "I am the [myth]" by Six-Out
- "Very cool take on evolution. The poems merge seamlessly, and the end ends them all well. Too many good parts to mention... but the double helix patterns of deceit stuck out, in particular."
Posted by stormtalk on "Evolution Theory [1-5]" by Six-Out
- "You're saying it's never better to die than to live? How can you pass judgment on someone who was in a Nazi internment camp, someone tortured in a North Korean prison, etc.? What if death really is better for them?"
Posted by stormtalk on "My Suicide Rant (revised)" by Six-Out
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