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- ""and this is the only world that i know"...soooo many times i have felt the same reality. you write well. you painted a picture of growing despair here and you did it well in just a few lines. you do indeed write very well."
Posted by thecitymorgue on "Girl in the Box" by GirlintheBox
- "This is how it should have been, alone. It's a great piece and it should stand by itself. Great write."
Posted by Rebirth on "Assonance" by GirlintheBox
- "I agree with Justin here,It is perhaps a little repatative...though,considering your age at the time,I think this is quite well written...I love how you've evolved from this though...you've come on loads,In my opinion...Butterfly..xxx..."
Posted by Railway_Butterfly on "Whenever I am Gone" by GirlintheBox
- "The "do you not" in the last line needs smoothing - maybe "can't" or "don't"? As for the rest of it... I think it's about as good as it will be. Not my favorite style, but well-written for what it is."
Posted by stormtalk on "Whenever I am Gone" by GirlintheBox
- "i did the "i think" theme on purpose...to emphasize the chorus since it doesnt do that, but then again, i was 12 or 13, and had never written b4, so what did i know? if u have any ideas on how to "tweek" it id be happy to listen"
Posted by GirlintheBox on "Whenever I am Gone" by GirlintheBox
- "ok so you want honesty. I think it's too repetitave, but the theme behind the lyrics is great, no better songs than the ones that stick it to someone else. I think maybe you could tweek it a little so not every line starts with "You think""
Posted by Rebirth on "Whenever I am Gone" by GirlintheBox
- "Hey Krystal! This poem is 'shittier' than mine! Go read "baby shit brown"! You'll see. Your 'poo' poem was some seriously 'funny shit'. I was just 'shitting around' when I wrote mine. Go see. Your 'shit' is better than my 'shit.' NO SHIT! ~Shane~"
Posted by Unknown on "This Morning I Stepped in a Pile of Poo" by GirlintheBox
- "i like the way you express yourself in ways i never could. you write with your soul.
-Tab"
Posted by Unknown on "Fade Away" by GirlintheBox
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