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Whenever I am Gone
By GirlintheBox
* I found this song I wrote at the same time I found "You Say". I wrote
the two within days of each other, so this one isn't that great as well,
but once again I find it interesting how my style has changed in the past
five or six years. Enjoy! *
Verse 1
You think I'm alive but I'm not really here.
You think I am happy, but what do you know?
You think I'm listening but I don't really hear.
You think I should leave, but there's nowhere to go.
You think I'm special, but you don't know my name.
You think I am naive, but it's just a disguise.
You think I'm in love, but I'm just playing the game.
You think I am simple, but have you looked me in the eyes?
Chorus
You think I'll succeed if I try a little harder.
It's too bad you don't know what's really going on.
Did you ever think I might not want to go farther?
I'll bet you won't give me a second thought
Whenever I am gone.
Verse 2
You think I can cry but no tears will come.
You think I can't feel when my emotions don't show.
You think my life's just starting, but I feel like it's done.
You think you are helping, but I just want you to go.
Bridge
You think I'm self-absorbed, but really I care.
You think I am rational, but I'm not always sane.
You think I'm selfish but I'm willing to share.
You think my life is sunny, do you not see all this rain?
Chorus
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Copyright 2004 Krystal Bray
Published on Monday, August 9, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Whenever I am Gone"
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On Wednesday, August 11, 2004, Lifeless
(38)
wrote:
Hey, you have a poem with a bunch of "You think"-s, I have a poem with a bunch of "I'm not"-s. cool. *Lifeless*
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On Wednesday, August 11, 2004, Lifeless
(38) wrote:
;-)
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On Monday, August 9, 2004, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
I agree with Justin here,It is perhaps a little repatative...though,considering your age at the time,I think this is quite well written...I love how you've evolved from this though...you've come on loads,In my opinion...Butterfly..xxx...
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On Monday, August 9, 2004, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
The "do you not" in the last line needs smoothing - maybe "can't" or "don't"? As for the rest of it... I think it's about as good as it will be. Not my favorite style, but well-written for what it is.
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A former member wrote:
brutally honest, poignantly sad and searchingly longing for...something. this would make a decent song indeed box girl.
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