Comments by All Members
- "very very original and somehow, I found it humorous - don't know if you were just playing about but I loved all the 'ip' sounds playing off each other and then the ..."falls dead" almost deadpan like ending...definitely different and refreshingly so for it...I thought it was pretty cool"
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "wall crawler meets his end..." by DIATRICUS
- "I sensed a bit of dramatic monologue here... a litotes, as if the reader were privy to the deliberation that precedes one's descent into the maelstrom... The bribery paragraph really intrigues me... So many questions arise: what is to be bribed? What is being negotiated... and the insertion of rhyme just seems to me to place a bit of emphasis on this little adage breakout. Unique, creative... makes me want to kick off the slippers and let Caligula take me away"
Posted by Unknown on "Not so..." by DIATRICUS
- "#3 kills me... I mean, how is adaptation somehow related to colder climate? It's harder to survive in hot climates than colder ones (provided the extremes are not too extraordinary for either). I mean, protection from freezing temperatures is easier than from scortching ones... I'd think that if adaptation were some kind of genetic factor, which assuming it is, is a far cry from identifying which gene(s) contribute to adaptability (or are there any that don't?--making it moot?), then it would make sense that the people who were able to adapt to the harshest climates would have the evolutionary edge. "
Posted by Unknown on "Race for Intellect..." by DIATRICUS
- "You've put a lot of thought into the ramblings of shit for brains, I see. I'm no geneticist, and I do admire the rigor of your approach, but isn't there only one map of the human genome? I, myself, would probably have wanted to contest the rigidity with which the categories must be defined and maintained in order to make such comparisons. On the other hand, there seems to biological (and I would assume, genetic) difference between a man and a woman of the same "race" than exhibits between two men of different races. This would seem to imply that the genetic diversity within a "race" is greater than the genetic diversity between "races". I opt for quotation marks because I contest that "race" is anything other than the reification of obvious differences that tend to evoke fear and/or surprise. The need to identify and "categorize" these differences, in my opinion, is a way to contend with the resulting fear. Maybe this is a case of reason being the slave of the passions, as Hume would say."
Posted by Unknown on "Race for Intellect..." by DIATRICUS
- "Very, very pretty to look at as you go along and visualize word by word. Very still, and centered. The free rhymes were were free and very unforced. Ani is right on the money. It pitter/patters."
Posted by Alanarchy on "absence less fond..." by DIATRICUS
- "The yearning in this piece is so agonizing, but the whole thing flows so beautifully, from one verse to the next that the pain is a pleasure to behold...I loved this piece and I cannot and I will not stop reading it. ^_^ ~Lavenia"
Posted by Lavenia on "absence less fond..." by DIATRICUS
- "I really like the first two lines of the 1st and 3rd stanzas...it has a very hesitant, subtle flow and rhythm. One of the best works I have read in a while. Thanks for posting this."
Posted by Amaryllis on "absence less fond..." by DIATRICUS
- "Wow. Thanks for the directions. Not sure how I missed this in the first place, and I regret not running across it sooner. Better than never. Epic is cliche, but It's there. Through the Id and ego. That's dangerous territory. Hearts a shield. I'm talking out of my ass. Hahah. I loved 'VII' And the way "we" aged from a child god and adolescent demon... man in the church... brothers. One of the most creative things I've read in a while. Thanks alot, man. That's a third eye, a fourth and fifth."
Posted by Alanarchy on "Twilight Lightning Alight Shattered Trespass" by DIATRICUS
- "Misery, torment, pain...loneliness & fear...you write of the emotions & feelings that too many young ones have known and are afraid to speak of until they are older or it has ended badly. To wish that the abusers could read this and know of the torment that they inflict upon a child, how they make a young soul weep...is a wish that will never be granted...but I hope that your words will touch many to help them see and feel how a young life can be shattered by such monstrosities of life and maybe those that read this piece will find it in their hearts to help those that cannot find solace in the simple tears of their silent pain...Powerful write. ~Lavenia~"
Posted by Lavenia on "double-bound" by DIATRICUS
- ""Saunter passed the rosy shoals
Sever thickly tainted glum
Fire whipped from painted coals
Cheer along the saddened plum
Awaken" i love this. great imagery. job well done :) Blessed Be
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Posted by Unknown on "Liquorish Curled in Sunkissed Swirl" by DIATRICUS
- "Ok, though I'm not entirely sure why you would keep something that merely reminded you of your first intention rather than replace it but again great write :-)
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Posted by Ashteroth on "Opusanguine Silence Slept" by DIATRICUS
- ""Paultry" was initially an unintended mis-spelling, but I retained it as it reminded me of 'poultry' -- if there is some hidden meaning that my sub-conscience is keyed into, I've yet to discern it overtly... thanks for the compliment"
Posted by DIATRICUS on "Opusanguine Silence Slept" by DIATRICUS
- "Bravo. After this I will be sure to read more from you, nice title by the way. Great flow and rhyme, nice vocab and strung together well. One thing, did you misspell paultry on purpose? is this someones name? "
Posted by Ashteroth on "Opusanguine Silence Slept" by DIATRICUS
- "So beautiful...so truthful...it is as if you have experienced the first joys of living, of beauty and happiness...of love...Breathless...btw, thanks for the fav ^_^"
Posted by Lavenia on "-- with love --" by DIATRICUS
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