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By verablue
Drag the blade down through martini ramblings
Measuring time in cigarettes
I’m swallowing words with saccharin promises
They taste just like childhood
Just like ambition
3 nails left to be hammered in place
Slamming down this prevarication on blue keys
And tiny metal stamps
A desolated story
A split lip
A violent kiss
I want more…
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© 2007 bazil zerinsky (verablue)
Published on Tuesday, March 6, 2007.
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"Poetry"
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On Friday, March 30, 2007, stormtalk
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wrote:
Stunning write, overall. I think "Measuring time in cigarettes" will stick with me, and you used the word "prevarication," so I'm sold.
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A former member wrote:
this is simply amazing. the last line truely echoed..brilliant and beautiful.
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On Thursday, March 8, 2007, Bella Butchery
(724) wrote:
....ok.... the first half had my heart at arrest. do you know how many times i have sat in the back of places smoking and drinking thinking the same thoughts? second half... left me
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On Tuesday, March 13, 2007, Bella Butchery
(724) wrote:
now that its been a while, the second half left me wanting more (hence the title, im sure). like an arrow shot straight up, your work always seems to grace the skies and bring ozone down with it. and you never know when its going to hit...
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On Wednesday, March 7, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
I really like this it carried a nice sting.. and it does actually leave you wanting more. brilliantly done.
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On Wednesday, March 7, 2007, carlosjackal
(3019) wrote:
..and so do I..brilliantly crafted, this was succinct dark art poetry at its best. :)
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On Tuesday, March 6, 2007, Mylissa
(845) wrote:
I want more, and more and more. you are just stunning. simply amazing with the flow, words and emotion.
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A former member wrote:
Hmmm. This leaves almost a dirty taste behind. I think the colour of the text does a bit of irony to the work. This is like a stamp, smashed into my consciousness. +tpu+
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A former member wrote:
and I want more.
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A former member wrote:
God this was so emotionally charging. Well done
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