inverno ~

By slow.burn.star

the stubble on your lip
scratched as we kissed

and burned my face warm.

poetic prose
faded from behind my eyelids
like sun spots over the ice.

I can see the snarl
curling on the edge
of your

bottom lip
as you scowl
at me.

a burden of soft soapy tears
unfolds along my cheek

taking my make-up off,
and me along with it.

I offer my cold hands
to cup your blackened
remembrance

although
I am foolish to think
they will suffice.


blood smeared down my thigh
like a watercolor sunset
of my cells

and you were more tender
then I could ever recall

like a child smashing ants.

I left.
turning out the light and
stumbling through the biting
night as

you slumbered.

eyelashes shuddering
against your placid
glacial
dreams.

I'm hypothermic now.

my breath
escapes in
frigid jolts

from my
lungs.


so I walk away faster.

everything numb and out of reach.

my eyes sting blue
with a torrent of sleet behind them

.
the way a persons face
blurs when you squint hard at it

you're growing dim

.
the sound of your
beating heart
under foggy glass.

and I decline.

the trail of my fingertips
dwindles on your skin

and is washed away

with the
falling snow

. . .. .

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© 2007 slow.burn.star
Published on Friday, January 19, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • ReddropX On Monday, March 17, 2008, ReddropX (20)By person wrote:

    This left me somewhat entranced. Nice work.

  • A former member wrote: "a burden of soft soapy tears unfolds along my cheek" made my eyes burn. Enjoyed it

  • nur hidayah On Thursday, April 19, 2007, nur hidayah (114)By person wrote:

    I don't know how I missed this. Seriously, your works epitomise the feeling I get when I fall asleep and dream of something unexplainable and beautiful. You give enticing glimpses of something grand.

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, April 19, 2007, carlosjackal (2787)By person wrote:

    This was just entirely fan-bloomin'-tastic..."and you were more tender/than I could ever recall/like a child smashing ants"..what a whammy of a line to finish the previous two. Altogether this was perfection.

  • Mylissa On Saturday, March 31, 2007, Mylissa (825)By person wrote:

    this left me aching for more. perfect.

  • stormtalk On Monday, March 26, 2007, stormtalk (727)By person wrote:

    Nicely done, I look forward to reading more.

  • stormtalk On Saturday, March 31, 2007, stormtalk (727)By person wrote:

    p.s. "frigid jolts" is a great description of hypothermia.

  • A former member wrote: 'placid glacial dreams', damn that's nice. Killer imagery. If you were trying to get the atmosphere across in this one, you hit the nail sqaure through the board. Bravo. -END

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Friday, February 2, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    You are one of the best in painting vivid imagery with your words. I particularly liked the contrast in the lines "and you were more tender then I could ever recall like a child smashing ants." Great piece! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, January 23, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    hard hearing about another, but as always, you astound me. if only you could act your feelings (ie poetry), you would be more happy. but that is just my oppinion.

  • A former member wrote: the images you invoke in this are so beautiful and harsh.."blood smeared down my thigh like a watercolor sunset of my cells" it's a sense of lovely with a bite..and the last line is perfect. amazing write.

  • A former member wrote: This sways at a whisper.. a sultry, aching piece.. crushing in the loveliest of manners.. you're fucking phenomenal.

  • A former member wrote: "blood smeared down my thigh like a watercolor sunset" Fantastic imagery! Vivid & sexual, wanton, thrillful.you. & even softly tender; "...soft soapy tears," even if it's a burden; or tender as "a child smashing ants." Yea, that's the stuff of poetry. ...

  • CorruptedLittleGirl On Friday, January 19, 2007, CorruptedLittleGirl (243)By person wrote:

    A truly beautiful depiction. The dwindling away at the end was heartbreaking. Certain lines just... impacted me. So eloquent yet natural.

  • Daughter_Of_The_Moon On Tuesday, February 6, 2007, Daughter_Of_The_Moon (106)By person wrote:

    Agreed, this is definatly impacting, and has left me feeling inspired.... -Heather-

  • Six-Out On Friday, January 19, 2007, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    again, as through the years, you stun me. this is something completely different than what you typically write, but this just goes to show that you master all areas. really. this is tragically ripping. you are talent.

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