The Flight of the Broken Winged
By RhymeBound
in my chest there beats no heart,
just a cold obsidian stone,
since fate chose our ways to part
and we walk our paths alone.
manifest's made my despair,
for forth from my grief bent
back
sprouts of tattered wings a pair,
broken and of feathers
black.
while my hands are laid in chains,
shackled to
my weary mind
your sweet memory that remains,
and the hurt
you left behind.
your path led you far away
from this
truly dreadful place,
while i found to my dismay,
mine made
me a chasm face.
this here vast and gaping hole,
where
no way there leads across,
be the abyss of my soul,
torn up
wide by pain and loss.
many months i've lingered here,
puzzled by what i should do.
even though it was so clear,
what so strongly binds me true.
now i know why i can't leave.
oh, i've just refused to see.
it's my sad and vain belief,
that one day you'll come back to me.
calmly i my shackles
shed,
gently sigh and draw a breath.
with great pain my wings
i spread
fearing neither life nor death.
and i reach
into my chest.
round the stone i close my hand.
rip it from
my bleeding breast,
unbowed i still upright stand.
a
soft smile, i onwards tread,
shall not waver, never shake.
hope's sweet promise lies ahead,
burning bridges in my wake.
yond the edge once and for all.
care not what the morrow brings.
i am free and free i fall,
.
.
.
watch me soar
on broken wings...
- RhymeBound
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Comments on "The Flight of the Broken Winged"
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On Sunday, November 25, 2012, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
for sure this site is for the broken, I read such wonderful voices, stiving to be heard.....I really enjoyed this thoroughly
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A former member wrote:
very beautiful
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A former member wrote:
This is simply beautiful. It is more akin to the style I favour. Quite a few pointers I can take about rhyme and how to communicate feelings. Keep up the good work.
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A former member wrote:
can anyone help me on learning how to favorite or bookmark a poem? sorry about posting it here :'(
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A former member wrote:
This poem gave me chills. You are such in incredible poet! I too write in couplet rhyme form. I was excited to read another poets work who also uses this form. Thank You for your poetry.
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A former member wrote:
I loved this. made me cry x
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A former member wrote:
Sprouts of tattered wings a pair... loved that line
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A former member wrote:
bloody good!
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On Thursday, March 18, 2010, HeadpatSlut
(257) wrote:
I like this one, it's very nearly perfect, but alas, there are some corrections. In the first stanza, it looks like "Are" should be "Our", and then in the second and third stanzas following, there are lines that throw off the flow, but yes, other than that, this is wonderful. Keep up to good work.
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A former member wrote:
love lost bringing out the evil in a man great story
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On Thursday, April 16, 2009, Shortnlethal
(65) wrote:
i really enjoyed reading your work..you depick things quiet well ^^
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A former member wrote:
I've got to say your one of the most talented poets I've came across
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On Tuesday, September 30, 2008, Daughter_Of_The_Moon
(106) wrote:
So I got this poem in my email the other day for the poem a day feature. You always surprise me with your poetry, It's always wonderful. It's funny how this time I read this particular work of yours it breaks my heart to think that this is what I did to my other half. As he always will be that somehow. Thanks for the write, as always its just as great as the first time I read it. -Heather-
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On Tuesday, June 3, 2008, Daughter_Of_The_Moon
(106) wrote:
I still gasp every time I read this work of yours. Glad to see you on! -Heather-
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On Friday, November 2, 2007, Niemand
(355) wrote:
'watch me soar on broken wings...' Love that line...-Airi
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On Saturday, October 20, 2007, Distorted_Reality
(100) wrote:
amazing ^_^
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On Monday, June 11, 2007, Preacher X
(34) wrote:
I love the power of all your works. Truely astounding. You are easily one of my favorite poets on DP so far.
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On Thursday, February 8, 2007, Daughter_Of_The_Moon
(106) wrote:
Shards of Silence said it all. And torn_beauty is right, You are definately a favorite, as anything you write is worth the time to be read. Thank you. -Heather-
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On Sunday, December 10, 2006, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
another piece that draws and envelopes the reader with it's language as well as the wonderful images and emotions.... excellent
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On Friday, December 8, 2006, torn_beauty
(77) wrote:
that was a tasty read. absolutely fantastic! yes, you are now on my favorites list so I don't miss any of your new works!!
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A former member wrote:
speechless...WOW...u dont kno me, but damn...this is fukin..beautiful!!
the flow, the rhyme...the vocabulary...brilliant, i can read over and over again and still love it...Great~
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On Saturday, December 2, 2006, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
This is classical, wondrous, truly spellbinding. Keep on writing :)
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A former member wrote:
i'm glad i'm not the only one who feels that way
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On Friday, October 20, 2006, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
Honestly.. This was GREAT! I loved every breath of it. Keep posting dude
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A former member wrote:
Oh Wow. Just as good as your first poem. Damn When are we going to get more of these bits of masterpieaces :-D ][Nstant ][Nsanity
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A former member wrote:
this is amazing!
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On Friday, October 13, 2006, elisa
(1595) wrote:
vintage vocabulary.... such a classic tongue .....i get lost in the language ...a beautiful write.
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On Wednesday, October 11, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(560) wrote:
I was waiting for you to post again and this was a bomb. The emotional hurt and abuse pierced me hard and left me shaking. I'm sorry you felt this pain or is feeling this pain~Gothic
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On Tuesday, October 10, 2006, blue
(1409) wrote:
hmm, you are beginning to turn back my distaste for rhyme.. well done. ~b
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A former member wrote:
"i am free and free i fall,...watch me soar on broken wings..." Oh my god...the imagery...the rhyming...this piece...GODS...I have to fave it...it's too beautiful not to...~*Beth*~
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On Monday, October 9, 2006, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
beyond beautiful and beyond any words of praise that could be uttered from my mouth. hopeful, determination, perseverence..something I needed to read, thank you :)
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On Monday, February 26, 2007, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
I just keep coming back to this...