Spin the bottle

By Bluegirl

Just one sip
takes me over the edge
and I'm sucked
in the downward
stagger and stumble
to stop the flow
like an octopus on land
I seek the sea



Just one tip/sy
of the bottle
and there's no telling -
you can't stop time
anymore than I can stop
the slur of scenery
It's like trying to hold
the ocean with a spoon



I am lost in my silent
C


O


R N E R


of hell, with nothing
but the swirl and defeat
of this bottle

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© 2006 Bluegirl
Published on Monday, September 18, 2006.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • Dancing_Monkey On Tuesday, September 19, 2006, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    Preaty good write. I like the flow and the wording. Octopus on land made me think of someone realy freaking out.. neat

  • TaintedButterfly On Monday, September 18, 2006, TaintedButterfly (653)By person wrote:

    I'm so happy I faved you! Wow this was hard hitting, in your face awesome poetry! I loved every line. It let me feel the anxiety throughout, along with your frustrations, and fears. Well done! Julia~

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