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the girl in the musicbox.
By i tremble
saturnine melodies
from a child's
musicbox
shimmer
like stars
above the
silence
as she dances,
in circles,
on her toes.
close the box
and she'll drop
like a doll,
pale pinafore
falling like
snow.
she'll hide in
the darkness
till you let in
the light
and force her
to dance
to a desolate
tune.
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© 2007 jodeanna franks
Published on Tuesday, August 29, 2006.
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"Poetry"
Comments on "the girl in the musicbox."
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On Friday, February 8, 2008, Syringe
(51)
wrote:
wow u took something that one would think as inanimate (or inadequate) twisted the viewer's perspective.
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On Saturday, September 1, 2007, thelostmessenger
(110) wrote:
wow. this is awesome. i loved it. *messenger
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On Saturday, November 4, 2006, Jaded Jezzabelle
(328) wrote:
incredible...i had forgot all about the tiny dancers in the music boxes of yesterday...so long ago and you captured the feeling they let perfectly.
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On Wednesday, October 4, 2006, hate_doll
(263) wrote:
fucking brilliant. I love te structure, it reminds me of a tiny dancer, tightly wound.
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On Tuesday, October 3, 2006, blue
(1409) wrote:
=) wow, every piece I read of yours has that something.. that draw. nice! ~b
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On Thursday, September 14, 2006, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
oh wow. I love this.
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On Wednesday, August 30, 2006, K_Love
(525) wrote:
This was beautiful. Feeling trapped inside something only for others, like their toy to play with, to listen to. Wonderful. You must upgrade or we will all haunt you!! :)
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On Wednesday, August 30, 2006, MESUN
(230) wrote:
om my fucking god. that is amazing. quite beautiful. i love it. yes, please stick around.
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On Wednesday, August 30, 2006, Rebel_not_Radical
(75) wrote:
~i agree with the comments before mine...I'll be looking forward to your works... Very cool
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A former member wrote:
upgrade or be haunted by dying, wonderland and ME. lol very lovely piece
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A former member wrote:
Divine. I hope you'll stay here.
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On Tuesday, August 29, 2006, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
I rather like this piece. Nice write.
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