Six Speeds to Eternity
By Doc
Start.
First.
Slowly moving into the realm,
Solely inhabited by memory,
Turning through the vagueness,
Only found in mere references,
Near the limit.
Second.
Low pitched groans,
Erupt into bloody screams,
Blood gargles in the throat,
The night lingers on,
Interrupted by mobile incandescence,
A deer in the headlights,
Third.
The man leans on the piano,
Staring at the wooden beam above,
Heaven is but three feet above,
The screaming stops,
Only silence is left,
Building, building, building.
Forth, The fall,
Heaven achieved dropping below,
The wind blows forth, icy cold,
Over the top, through the windows,
Rocking back and Fifth.
The door opens,
Illuminating white framework,
Pulled from the sheet metal,
Oil pouring, in its illustrious red,
Explanation void and misunderstood,
Running, running, running,
Burning.
Clutch.
Sixth, Images assault the remnants of the fragmented mind,
To fast to stop now,
Approaching the eventual limit,
Tree, Piano.
Tree, Piano.
Tree, Piano.
Tree.
Wire, Cliff.
Wire, Cliff.
Cliff.
Restraints removed,
Jump into oblivion.
He was an angel in his last moment,
And then there was the fall.
Comments on "Six Speeds to Eternity"
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A former member wrote:
wow..i cant even begin to explain how this Great Work of Art made me feel, keep posting please!!
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On Monday, April 14, 2008, colorapathy
(50) wrote:
Wow.. that last line was just incredible.. I can't even describe.. just incredible.
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On Thursday, October 27, 2005, Sin
(1135) wrote:
dear god sonny that last line did me in...this was captivating and had me racing to the next line just to lose my breath at the very end...you have talent dear *gives you a cookie* ~granny
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A former member wrote:
there is such beauty in this breaking.. loved the rushing desperation of it, and the soft [sur]reality in the final stanza. . .excellent write
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A former member wrote:
..a literary plunge..these words pushed me to the edge of my cliff, still holding tight to my ankles..simply astonishing..a tragic breath of fresh. ~ Kristie
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On Wednesday, October 26, 2005, ApathysKiss
(377) wrote:
gripping and vivid weave of atmosphere, imagery and flow like the flapping wind.....such a moving ending...~michelle
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On Wednesday, October 26, 2005, ApathysKiss
(377) wrote:
and title too...sadenning...
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On Wednesday, October 26, 2005, little butterfly
(36) wrote:
Images assault the remnants of the fragmented mind-brilliant line then-He was an angel in his last moment,just made this poem brilliant
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A former member wrote:
Fast-paced and unrelenting. This rocks.
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On Wednesday, October 26, 2005, Err0r
(358) wrote:
Maliciously sweet.