It's your birhday today

By Dr Benway

You used to tell me
"Every scar has an excuse,
and every excuse has a story."
We fucked in a book store bathroom,
then again on a pick nick table,
You held my hair from my ear and whispered,
"Please let me love you, we can do this together"
Three days later you died in my lap.
In your wallet was a picture of us,
and enough to buy two points,
and a rose for your grave.
Today I sit here, thinking of you,
looking down on spoiled veins wrapped in broken skin,
all held together with safety pins and dollar store nail polish,
and I say,
"Every scar has an excuse,
and every excuse has a story."
but it will always sound better when you say it.

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Copyright 2005 Dr Benway on a house call
Published on Tuesday, February 8, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Too brilliant

  • A former member wrote: firstly ..kudos on the courage to express and feel what most would be tempted to bury in the mourn, ...something so true/real and ultimately gut wrenching shouldnt be so beautiful but until that moment you were both glowing in your demise,..romance has no discrimination and what you felt was every bit as real as white picket fence love..so sorry for your loss,....stay well mate.

  • Simply Me On Thursday, September 20, 2007, Simply Me (40)By person wrote:

    This is so sad and I needed to read it. Thank you for writing it, I'm sorry you lived it.

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, January 9, 2007, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    oh my good, this is amazingly sad and beautifully written. It has made my insides churn, it has moved me so. I want to give you a hug so much.

  • A former member wrote: damned good.

  • void On Friday, May 6, 2005, void (35)By person wrote:

    wow... that was truly an amazing work. ~V~

  • A Velvet Tongue On Thursday, March 31, 2005, A Velvet Tongue (434)By person wrote:

    In your wallet was a picture of us, and enough to buy two points, "...damn....just....damn... im moved..and i dont truly move often...simplistic..yet brilliant..damn

  • Sin On Saturday, March 26, 2005, Sin (1135)By person wrote:

    damn this was heartbreaking...

  • Sticky Kitty On Saturday, March 26, 2005, Sticky Kitty (241)By person wrote:

    lovely dear -kitty

  • A former member wrote: the more i read the more i like your work! i love it! i guess that knowing your background helps me wih it. thanks for sharing that by the way. bold of you.

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    I hope you don't hate me if I never want to read this again. I'm sure you'd understand why.

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, August 17, 2005, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    And fuck me. I read it again.

  • Dr Benway On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, Dr Benway (48)By person wrote:

    I played around with this to try and make it shaped like a rose, I can't use any colours, but you get the idea :)

  • sIo On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, sIo (898)By person wrote:

    wow this was breath taking and sweet. i'm sorry for your loss. what doesn't destroy us can only build us up to a greater life.

  • The Crimson Queen On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, The Crimson Queen (917)By person wrote:

    aww..i'm sorry babe....brilliantly written however...

  • The Crimson Queen On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, The Crimson Queen (917)By person wrote:

    and very powerful as many have already said.. I loved it ... hehe

  • A former member wrote: this was incredible very brilliant, and powerful.

  • AniDayz On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, AniDayz (812)By person wrote:

    SO many lines just hit me in the face with brilliance...

  • AniDayz On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, AniDayz (812)By person wrote:

    'looking down on spoiled veins wrapped in broken skin all held together with safety pins and dollar store nail polish'KICKASS 'we fucked in a bookstore bathroom then again on a picknic table...'AHHH.

  • AniDayz On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, AniDayz (812)By person wrote:

    shit...powerful indeed. this is exceptional..man..so many kick ass words that outline this and flow so well. i can't even describe how i feel...this is simply amazing.

  • Lotophagi On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    this is so powerful..... just an amazing write, affected me a lot. Thank you.

  • Zara Synn On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, Zara Synn (57)By person wrote:

    Loved the imagery here...especially the spoiled veins wrapped in broken skin...

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    oh my... this is so beautiful and so sad. I think the lines " Looking down on spoiled veins wrapped in broken skin, all held together with safety pins and dollar store nail polish"

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    give a wonderful and original image. I just want to wrap you up and hug you. *hugs*

  • elisa On Tuesday, February 8, 2005, elisa (1595)By person wrote:

    it's amazing how the authenticity of a palpable friend can mean the difference between a pleasurable now and a sorrowful then~elisa

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