Seaside
By Kinkypoptart
She comes to my home so early
To cry on my beach in the sand
She screams at the heavens in agony
As the water washes over her feet
She hates the way he beats her
and the way he calls her names
So she comes by the seaside to see me
hoping he'll go down in flames
She comes to the beach in search
Of a life shes never known
She cries to the clouds in the sky
as she kills herself ever slowly
She hates the way he treats her
and the way he despises her life
So she comes by the seaside to see me
When her life becomes nothing but strife
She comes to the sea to seek peace
In the troubled mind she posesses
She depresses herself with her fear
as the wind blows through her hair
She hates the way he controls her
and wishes that she could be free
So she comes by the seaside to see me
and I dry her tears so she can see
She comes to the beach for nothing at all
For all realization has come to her now
She laughs at the way he once hated her
and wishes he'd die every day
She hates the way he breathes
and the way he walks about
So she comes by the seaside to see me
and celebrates; she finally got out
Comments on "Seaside"
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A former member wrote:
Tastes the wind with my eyes as the salt air laps at my tongue. Nicely done, hears the waves dance across the pebbles as she relinquishes her pain
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On Saturday, June 16, 2007, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Really good write. There's a comforting melancholy to this for me. If only all victims of women-beaters could escape their hell to take in the glorious nothing of the seaside. -Carl
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A former member wrote:
it's sad to say that we've all at least known someone who's been there. even through the pain you've still given beauty and hope for the escape and freedom of those trapped. wonderful poem!
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A former member wrote:
The ocean is vast and empty at times... le sigh.
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A former member wrote:
the first verse is absolutely haunting and the repetition excellent
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On Sunday, May 22, 2005, little butterfly
(36) wrote:
i know how this feels
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On Wednesday, May 18, 2005, ONEANDLONELY
(114) wrote:
Most of my favorite poems echo in my head in the form of music. This does it so sweetly.
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On Wednesday, May 11, 2005, Chimauron
(87) wrote:
I know someone in a situation like this. Don't we all, really? I wish they would let men like me go and just remove men like that from the gene pool before they reproduce. Great conveyance of emotion in this piece. And I too am glad to see she got away. ;
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On Saturday, April 30, 2005, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
such pain and attachments, break the chains girls break them
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A former member wrote:
"She comes to the beach for nothing at all" Softly trancing w/ a dark edge; mournful in pained beauty. I could feel music cut w/ heavy & a black vein as I read this piece. Well done; "as she kills herself ever slowly"
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On Saturday, April 16, 2005, Angst Queen
(370) wrote:
Well done with a nice focus. Its good that in the end she escaped
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On Sunday, May 9, 2004, steuss
(92) wrote:
Very well done, i love the use of repitition, and the progressive developement of the stanzas. I was pleased to see an ending that offered release and growth! Yay! Great Read!