A boy named Christian.

By Exodus


I stare at the sun
Your eyes drain the light

A stark cold resemblance

I see you falling apart
Tragically beautiful

With your fingers spread

Reaching desperately
To hold nothingness

Knowing its not there

I remembered your name
But you still search for the answers

You remind me
Of myself

So lost

Among the chaos

And we don’t care
If the world ends

Not anymore

Our hearts
Crossed and pierced

And lied to

Fed through this madness
A violent kill, thrashing his victims


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We stare at the sun
And we try to forget

That none of this is real.

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Copyright 2004 Exodus
Published on Friday, January 30, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: "we stare at the sun / and we try to forget / that none of this is real." This ending very much intrigued me. The difference between reality and fiction, or what others want us to think something is... I also got a sense of companionship in the breaking, through the end, lying down...dead? Given up? And then of course, nothing has to be real- but now I'm rambling. You gave me a lot to think about, thank you!

  • Kinkypoptart On Tuesday, May 9, 2006, Kinkypoptart (555)By person wrote:

    Im stunned. Great write ~*~tart~*~

  • LovedByAMiracle On Sunday, February 1, 2004, LovedByAMiracle (51)By person wrote:

    lovely poem. i really enjoyes it, you have a lot of talent

  • red_haze On Sunday, February 1, 2004, red_haze (52)By person wrote:

    this is a beautiful work.

  • PaperPromises On Friday, January 30, 2004, PaperPromises (54)By person wrote:

    i love this.. great job.. i don't know how else i can possibly describe how deep i think this is.. very relateable.. definitely a favorite to bookmark. -CW

  • stormtalk On Friday, January 30, 2004, stormtalk (729)By person wrote:

    Absolutely awesome... "And lied to" falls like a brick wall... the whole thing is tragically beautiful... great work. I'd write more, but I'm too anxious to read the next!

  • A former member wrote: I just wanted to say that was really good. ShatteredDreamz

  • A former member wrote: That's a stunning ending to an absolutely beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing - I loved it. : ) ~Wish Upon A Star

  • Seraphic On Friday, January 30, 2004, Seraphic (209)By person wrote:

    There's something to be said about the naive feel of this, like that of a young child, it's interesting, I like it *~seraph~*

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