My Descent
By Liath
Foreword: I wrote this in parts. I'm not sure where to end it, so for now
I'm gonna keep adding onto it I think..anyway, I'll label the beginning
of a new "part" and you tell me where you think it should end, if so thus
far. I'm very proud of this, so enjoy. Thanks all. ~ Liath
My Descent
[Start Part 1]
As he arose from his seat
A light sadness filled his eyes
I knelt at his feet
and kindled my despise.
His sorrowful words took flight
Down through the tense air
They alighted upon my ears like the serpent's bite
I knew no punishment would be unfair.
He stepped forward
And branded my forehead with his palm
Already I felt myself being pulled downward,
I accepted this with composure, listening to the defeaning calm.
My wings were branded as well
They began to bleed and decay
A hardened shell, developed around my heart
And protruding from my skull, jagged spikes made their way.
The bright aura around my face
At last began to fade
Replaced by a fluid veil of blackened lace
It was a decision I gladly made.
Finally, the clouds parted
Beneath me, and revealed the Earth
Here and there, truly bless'ed messengers darted
Witnessing the Falling of The One consumed by his mirth.
[Start Part 2]
A brilliantly gleaming tear
Rolls down Michael's face
Not even that--my soul- did it shear
I seek no pity in this place.
Down to the ground of my lair, eternal
Through the layers of my scryable sky
Now do I begin every living soul's personal journal
All who follow Him...into Heaven...I damn to die.
Inciting hatred in others
Challenging those to disregard Him without repentance
Any seraph who chooses to follow, must burn his feathers
And accept the bite of The Serpent.
[Start of Part 3]
I walk among you looking for more
Bloody wings folded back, clawed heels supporting my form
Leading you slowly, come, sin, you have before
You're all ever closer to a place quite warm.
Each strike you raise up against Him
Weakens He and His powers
Soon enough He will fall and Life will dim
And then I will be the Great Ruler from which everyone cowers.
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Okay, this is all I have thus far...this took me about 2 hours total..I
plan on adding more, unless you all say otherwise. Before the 2nd part,
it didn't have much of a point. Comment please, tell me what you think.
=)
Special thanks to Recycled to proof reading. =) I did write most of this
at 2 in the morning..
Comments on "My Descent"
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On Monday, May 3, 2004, Kainoa
(20) wrote:
I would like to see more too... I love what you have so far though...and i also think you need to be in the same frame of mind for whatever you create as the next part, if you choose to do more... ~*Candi*~
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On Saturday, April 17, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
this is shurly a 02:00 write.. It shined strongly. and the follow up would be apriciated written in the same mind mood. 'I like it alot. you use alot of worts that I find old and used up. but I totaly dig the feel and structure.. Monkey
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A former member wrote:
I concure! More needs to be added! ^_^ "leading you, slowly, come, sin, you have before" Wonderful word choice right there! Love it!!! ~Shadow~
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On Thursday, April 15, 2004, Cinn
(152) wrote:
oh this is really good like this but adding more would be good too
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On Thursday, April 15, 2004, murder_in_clubland
(384) wrote:
ADD More~ss
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
the 1st part is truly awesome, the imagery and feel of it,that alone would stand alone as an awesome poem, i cant wait to read more this is great