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Antique Fancy
By Mistress Morbid
Basking in the sun's warmth
Listening to the waves
Crash against the rocks
Down below
The sound so placid
Gives a sense of smugness
Dozing off...
Awaking
Noticing a stranger
Sitting on a rock
Off a ways
Staring at her intensely
She sheilds her eyes
From the brightness
Of the sun
How long have you
Been sitting there?
She had asked stunned
Smiling still not taking
His eyes off of her
He then stands up
Slowly and walks
Over to her
Feeling slightly frightened
She scoots back a bit
Noticing her uneasyness
He kneels a few feet
Away from her and
Proceeds to draw a
Heart in the sand
He looks up to her
And smiles
Feeling shocked
That anyone would
Ever show any compassion
Towards her
She gets up and kneels
Down next to him and
Draws another heart
Interlocking the other
As she looks up to him
To smile back
He gives her a strong embrace
Tears of joy filling her eyes
'That was good grandma! Tell us another story?'
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Copyright 2004 Morbid Derangement
Published on Wednesday, March 10, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Antique Fancy"
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On Saturday, March 13, 2004, Lynaes
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wrote:
Aw, beautiful and heart warming. The last line gave a final twist of dreamy tenderness. Lovely work, I must say. :) ~L
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A former member wrote:
Aww... that was really surprizing. "That was beautiful grandma. Tell us another." That was really weird. I really do love the poem, but I'm not so sure if the last line fits. =-MO-=
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On Saturday, March 13, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
That is the whole point of the story. Their grandma telling them how she met their grandpa. I dont see how it doesnt....but thank you
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A former member wrote:
It was good, it just kind of sounded like it came out of nowhere to me. I don't know, just my opinion. Good job though. =-MO-=
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On Thursday, March 11, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
I love that element of surprise! This I had fun writing...Thank you for your comments.
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On Wednesday, March 10, 2004, Stranger
(263) wrote:
Your storytelling is so engaging. When I am reading your poems, I never want them to end.
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A former member wrote:
Ahh a beautiful tale, with a suprising ending. Wasn't expecting that! ~Wish Upon A Star
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