Response to ALWAYS FEEL THE RAIN (it can't rain all the time)
By Sky Singer
lying naked
in my
cozy
lonely
bed is just
another reminder
of how
far way
you are
and i try to
strip myself
of this
weakness
as easily as
yesderday's jeans
[and the sky turns grey]
we are what
we have
always been
looking for;
imperfect,
but the pieces
fit.
how unfair is
the timing
that
binds us
and
divides us.
and i can
hear you
say:
"but darlin',
life's not fair"
[and the rain clouds thicken]
but
lying naked
in my
comforitable
uncomforting
bed is just
another reminder
that
tomorrow
is one day
closer
and time
will not always
divide
and i take comfort in this
[and the sky fades to blue]
with a smile
spread wide
across my
sleepy
countenance
i curl up
in my
cozy
loney
bed
with only
dreams
of you.
[it won't be raining tomorrow]
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Copyright 2004 jess wolfe
Comments on "Response to ALWAYS FEEL THE RAIN (it can't rain all the time)"
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On Tuesday, March 2, 2004, _Andrew_
(245) wrote:
nto bad at all, the beginnign was very nicely done, nice symbolism.
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On Saturday, February 28, 2004, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
I like! You write so well! Keep it up!
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On Thursday, February 26, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
Awesome write, I enjoyed the flow. Great work. ~L
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On Thursday, February 26, 2004, Exodus
(172) wrote:
i was expecting a grim outcome with this....but it turned out nice and optimistic....lovely work..
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On Thursday, February 26, 2004, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
Awwwe, now this is a purdy piece. Beautifuly done. [D&A]
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On Thursday, February 26, 2004, Sky Singer
(153) wrote:
thanks, Doc
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On Thursday, February 26, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
this is really wonderful...I love the interspersed reports on the sky...terrific turns of phrase "we are what we have always been looking for; imperfect, but the pieces fit." and "lying naked in my comforitable uncomforting bed". Great
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A former member wrote:
damn. that one hit me pretty hard. but in a really warm, nostalgic way. kudos. i really like it. much. love.
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A former member wrote:
i love this. it makes me miss my lovey. thanks. =) _-=Evil=-_
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On Wednesday, February 25, 2004, Sky Singer
(153) wrote:
...i miss mine, too. thanks for the comment
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A former member wrote:
"Can't Rain All The Time" Fits this poem just right. I love you Jess!