Dashed Hopes

By nightshade

dashed hopes, shattered dreams
nothing quite what it seems
Black barbs of pain and terror to
honing in straight on you
torment hear my bitter cry
envisioned pain let to fly
hate and hurt turn me cold
eating chasms in my soul
Karma brings back to you
a hundred fold of the pain dealt by you
sleepless nights tortured days
oh how I wish I could stay
To sit and watch your find decay
yet it is my wish to unbound the fey
brought forth from anger,icy hate
unleashed from hell to seal your fate

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Copyright 2004 nightshade
Published on Monday, February 23, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Deaths Apostle On Wednesday, November 24, 2010, Deaths Apostle (65)By person wrote:

    Definitely like the way this poem flows, but I personally don't believe in Karma, I'm more of a Revnege type myself...All in all though ,good write XD

  • Lynaes On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    Excellent rhyming skill, an awesome piece indeed. ~L

  • A former member wrote: first two lines are my favorite! i lvoe ur work so keep writing

  • OLd SouL On Saturday, February 28, 2004, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    Honestly.. the flow needs a bit of work BUT the emotion is great. Raw, powerful. Find the balance... you can't over concentrate on rhyme or you'll miss the emotion/point. But if you don't have enough, the piece will not be smooth.. Its tough.. but you're

  • OLd SouL On Saturday, February 28, 2004, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    good. :) :::OLd

  • flying_fox On Friday, February 27, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    great use of rhyme here Night...a very vicious piece. I like it! FF


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