Touched

By Godot

Touched

"but you left her for this strange, burning kind of girl
who hurt you for all the right reasons
but in the end was a sinister little bitch."
~ Sinister, E.E.

it was ten shy of eleven
in a hazy sort of heaven
laughing with an apathy so green
and the truth was underlying
here lay autumn slowly dying
October's dark looked bitter as caffeine

a last resort of sorts, of course
but no repentence, no remorse
no, not for this, for this i sing
of sin and gin and everything
that lets me write of distant shores
and other petty metaphors
without much care for how I feel
regret, or other such concerns
like how each nervous tendon burns
and yearns to scratch a line or two
that seem to be quite overdo

---

so long it's been since i have seen
the edges of your smile
sly and sweet and full of heat
so quick and versatile
alas my love you do me wrong
your words are harsh, your will is strong
impassioned and with style

very much with style
a lady to the end...

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Published on Sunday, October 6, 2002.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Devilish On Sunday, November 13, 2011, Devilish (2633)By person wrote:

    HAD to read this again.... Scholar

  • Devilish On Friday, October 21, 2011, Devilish (2633)By person wrote:

    Beautiful... I love to read someone i've never read and get this kind of feel.... Hello there... Scholar

  • DarkDruidess On Wednesday, December 29, 2010, DarkDruidess (313)By person wrote:

    Your words keep drawing me in...nicely done again. Wonderful to find...*bows*

  • purr_verse On Friday, April 6, 2007, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    You're exceptional. Is your writing available anywhere else? I'd pay.

  • Sin On Friday, March 30, 2007, Sin (1135)By person wrote:

    this was magnificent..and the ending was perfection! ~kristy

  • sIo On Friday, February 11, 2005, sIo (898)By person wrote:

    i agree in full with steuss...couldn't have said it better.

  • steuss On Thursday, April 8, 2004, steuss (92)By person wrote:

    Again, the flow and rhyme is breathtaking, which doens't detract from the meaning. Very intregueing (sp?) read.

  • capt_funguy On Sunday, March 21, 2004, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    such a unique style ... very trippy cadence ... like it's hidden , and you fall into it ... there's nothing obvious about this ... funguy

  • Bluegirl On Sunday, September 7, 2003, Bluegirl (177)By person wrote:

    This poem was very flowy and caught my attention from the start :)

  • Audrey_Star On Thursday, July 31, 2003, Audrey_Star (26)By person wrote:

    "who hurt you for all the right reasons" are there right reasons...?

  • A former member wrote: I like the way you write this and the way it flows, almost reminds me of Poe.

  • cre On Saturday, March 15, 2003, cre (410)By person wrote:

    Amazing to read -- your words flow like no other. Excellent.

  • purr_verse On Monday, March 27, 2006, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    Agree completely. I have not seen metred poetry done better; this is as tight as Poe, Tennyson, Eliot. Just magnificent.

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