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Jesus wants to die.
By Exodus
This is a quickie...I've been having trouble writing lately...Enjoy!
Imperfect one
Buried in your flaws.
Suffocated with lies
You formed against yourself
Ages ago.
You bleed in me.
And I have taken good care.
I know I’m only here
For you to abandon.
But I still believe.
And over the years.
I have grown a hate
From a false love.
And it stirs a storm
For you to bear
And still this wound is wide open
And its getting infected
The more you plead with me.
I wont subside.
You are too good to be true.
If I would’ve seen you bleed
With my own eyes.
And if I would’ve tasted you clean.
Then I would see you as something real.
But not today.
Today I hate you.
Today you made me feel alone.
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Copyright 2003 Exodus
Published on Wednesday, December 3, 2003.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Jesus wants to die."
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A former member wrote:
I sense the suggestion of the stigmata here, very clever... I love the last lines, too, they resonate with my own experiences, too true. Another case of making believe... Camus... perhaps Santayana is the best read for the nature of making oneself believe
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A former member wrote:
... to combat nihilism... very nice write!
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A former member wrote:
I know what you feel, I to feel the same as of late. Good Work you got some awesome talent.
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A former member wrote:
The flow and word usage are perfect if not simply amazing. It really pulls you in to the emotion of it all. Nice
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On Monday, December 29, 2003, Mr King
(547)
wrote:
i understand how you feel... still my stand is less extreme in some ways and more extreme in others... Christ Vice is dead.
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A former member wrote:
'And it stirs a storm' The simplicity of this piece holds the weight of a magnum opus, an epic exodus.
;fear not the sense of loss in your writing, the craft is still splendid.
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2003, Audrey_Star
(26) wrote:
The last three lines of this poem sent shivers up my back. This is truly a nice piece of work.
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On Sunday, December 7, 2003, spaniellie
(76) wrote:
beautiful. "I know I’m only here For you to abandon." great line. and your last two were great for closing. nice write.
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On Saturday, December 6, 2003, manunkind
(64) wrote:
i'm feeling like that right now. sigh. nice work though, i love it.
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A former member wrote:
...Where is your god when you lay empty and dying inside?...This work of yours says what I'm sure many feel.
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