Windowed
By sole
I open my blinds after I get up,
And sit in my concrete chair.
All day, everyday,
Gazing out with a jealous glare.
I see the world in a pane.
Pathetic.
Disgusting.
Disabled.
It's all the same.
If I'm lucky I get some rain.
Usually I'm stuck with passing cars,
Bouncing balls,
And the occassional street football game.
Mundane.
I need something else to watch.
I'm tired of shiny cars strolling by,
And the tall grass in a sway
Being the highlight of my day.
I would break this window down
If it would take me anywhere.
Maybe feel the breeze instead of watching it,
And get a breath of fresh air.
Though it would only be a tease,
A taste that would haunt.
Something I can't have,
But something I want.
I watch life like a pervert,
Wanting it so bad it hurts.
I hate this room. I have this view.
I hate this envy and I hate you too.
If you could see what I see
Would you would act differently?
Flaunting and taunting me
With your normality.
I wonder what it's like from the other side.
What do you think of me?
Some insignifacant shadow?
A figure in the window?
Comments on "Windowed"
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On Wednesday, January 7, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
sirius shit.. you must be the flow master dude.. awsome write.. It holds so much sense to me.. Peter
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On Tuesday, November 18, 2003, Delilah
(113) wrote:
yup...lovin' this one too...~Delilah~
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A former member wrote:
Yea I have to say this rocks. The bitterness is apparent but so is the acceptance... very good work here, keep writing.
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, Drea
(1388) wrote:
the rhyme is perfect. just an amazing write..~Drea~
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
This is amazing. Your writting...is so different then any other I have read, and it flows and goes where it needs to...to get to the point and spread the feeling. Wow...this one is...just amazing. ~JMDW~
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, cre
(410) wrote:
Fantastic write . . I am a huge fan of rhyme and I really enjoyed the way this flowed . . very, very nice. The story is sad, angry, bitter, resentful . . but it is all wrapped in a rather fine poetic embrace.
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On Friday, November 14, 2003, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
Your rhyme is magnificent. It flows where it should and leads the reader through your thoughts. Not that the meaning is lost... It is brought out by the rhyme.
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A former member wrote:
Holy shit. The flow in this was awsome and the rhyming was placed perfectly. A sad and bitter write but written well. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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A former member wrote:
mundane... i like it