a boy [a story]
By pessum ire animus
run, run away young man
leave all your troubles behind
forget
your family, forget your friends
it doesnt matter, its all to end.
drift, drift away pained soul
from the pleasures of this
suffering
youve nothing left to live for
no reasons yet to
die
school drags on, you despise going
a school of
outcast, still on your own
disturbed presence, uncontrollable emotions
filled with hate, with only passion.
a destroyed childhood
your father, a disgrace
a torn home leaves scars
upon your
heart of stone.
escaping... from what?
misleading information
you dont know why
you dont know how
all you know
is
to jump
to shoot
to cut
to haze...
to die.
you are i... i am you...
what happens to
me...
will happen to you...
what has happened to you...
instilled in my soul...
Comments on "a boy [a story]"
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On Monday, November 23, 2009, nightshade
(118) wrote:
I must say that this is a very thrilling piece which drags you down the verse. It is so simple yet hints at the true struggle which breathes right below the depths. A struggle which feels as if it reaches out from the page.
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A former member wrote:
you can feel the emotion put into it. and i know two brotheres who this story can relate to. it was a pleasure to read this. -Kat
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On Friday, June 18, 2004, aXe FactoR
(333) wrote:
love the last stanza, a punch in the gut...awesome write, again. -MeL-
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On Tuesday, October 28, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
another incredible piece. this digs deep into the heart and rips the tears out.
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On Sunday, October 26, 2003, A Velvet Tongue
(434) wrote:
"misleading information "..life's dosages of this 411 is far too high to stomach without poisoning..I loved this piece because it rode a different edge than most poems i've read as of late....it has a feeling of an insigificant limbo, yet a profound glory
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On Sunday, October 26, 2003, manywalks
(747) wrote:
You know this had the most perfect cadence, excellent! ~ mw
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On Friday, October 24, 2003, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...yes, this is a good work...I like the dark atmosphere you put into this...it really grips the reader...nicely done... -Darun
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On Friday, October 24, 2003, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
I don't know what ur talkin bout when u say it is a bad piece! I like it!
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On Friday, October 24, 2003, diavolessa
(207) wrote:
"you are i... i am you... what happens to me... will happen to you... what has happened to you... instilled in my soul..." haunting, i crept through the darkness of this page and stole a little piece of me! lovin' it! {dia}
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On Friday, October 24, 2003, Sky Singer
(153) wrote:
my darling, you've changed your name yet again: back to times of old, i see. powerful words, poignant write... ti amo.
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On Friday, October 24, 2003, BleedSilver
(298) wrote:
Awesome write...really describes life, and I can definately relate to it.-Mike
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A former member wrote:
"a torn home leaves scars/ upon your heart of stone"....that really hit the heart with me...described me...was me....great way to put it....I like....I love...great
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On Friday, October 24, 2003, Cinn
(152) wrote:
ditto ditto ditto and simply amazing
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On Thursday, October 23, 2003, nell
(270) wrote:
i like this thought... it is really sad how some of us really do only know how to die
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A former member wrote:
hmmmmmm, that last stanza was awesome. really was. i like this, i like it very much so indeed
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On Thursday, October 23, 2003, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
hmmmmmmm, this is impressive my friend .... you are i ... and i am you. [Excellent Expression].[D&A]