To Be In Love With You

By RoseTheBrokenHearted

It's like I am trapped inside a box,
And I can barely move.
This is what it feels like,
To be in love with you.

One day you love me,
and you're not very far,
Other days,
I wonder where you are.

It's like we're running in circles,
As we're clouded in doubt.
This is what it feels like,
To be in love with you.

Nights were short,
and our days were long,
This is the story,
that wrote out our song.

You watched the hurt
that came from your lies,
And as you talked to me that night,
you cried.

The first time your walls came down,
And you had let me in,
That's what it feels like,
To be in love with you.

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Published on Thursday, March 7, 2019. Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"

Comments on "To Be In Love With You"

On Wednesday, August 3, 2016, Dark Chocolate (19) wrote:

I felt trapped in the structure, your poem rescued me.
On Thursday, April 21, 2016, felicity0444 (61) wrote:

Amazing. This piece really touched me. I understand exactly where you are coming from and can feel your grief for the one that is right there, but not there at all too. Thank you
On Thursday, April 21, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (129) wrote:

Thank you so very much.
A former member wrote: This was soft, genuine and graceful. Hopelessly in love (: Great piece!
On Monday, April 18, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (129) wrote:

Thank you much! (:
On Saturday, April 16, 2016, Queazenart (212) wrote:

Oh, God, this poem gives me a feeling like... I don't know how else to describe it but "shitty". Yeah, it gives me a "shitty" feeling. That's NOT to say the poem is shitty- It's actually freakin' fantastic. The image I get while reading it, though, is off this cold, distant faux-lover who can't seem to treat the speaker with the respect and affection they deserve. THAT's why I get a "shitty" feeling from it... And it's really awesome that you were able to conjure that feeling in me.
On Saturday, April 16, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (129) wrote:

That is precisely how it is, and it's not that he is a shitty person, but his actions because of someone else is what makes it shitty. But thank you so much for such wonderful feedback!
On Saturday, April 16, 2016, tmanzano (210) wrote:

Good perspective poetry here and I can feel the subject. The tone is somber and somewhat seductive if that makes sense. I enjoyed this and it kept my attention throughout. Nice work.
On Saturday, April 16, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (129) wrote:

It makes perfect sense to me. I am glad you enjoyed! :)
A former member wrote: Pretty decent flow. The lines "That's what it feels like, to be in love with you" almost have a singsong feel when I read them.
On Saturday, April 16, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (129) wrote:

The singsong feel is actually what I was going for, but thank you much.