To Be In Love With You

By RoseTheBrokenHearted

It's like I am trapped inside a box,
And I can barely move.
This is what it feels like,
To be in love with you.

One day you love me,
and you're not very far,
Other days,
I wonder where you are.

It's like we're running in circles,
As we're clouded in doubt.
This is what it feels like,
To be in love with you.

Nights were short,
and our days were long,
This is the story,
that wrote out our song.

You watched the hurt
that came from your lies,
And as you talked to me that night,
you cried.

The first time your walls came down,
And you had let me in,
That's what it feels like,
To be in love with you.

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Copyright 2016 RoseTheBrokenHearted
Published on Thursday, March 7, 2019.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"
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  • Dark Chocolate On Wednesday, August 3, 2016, Dark Chocolate (18)By person wrote:

    I felt trapped in the structure, your poem rescued me.

  • felicity0444 On Thursday, April 21, 2016, felicity0444 (61)By person wrote:

    Amazing. This piece really touched me. I understand exactly where you are coming from and can feel your grief for the one that is right there, but not there at all too. Thank you

  • RoseTheBrokenHearted On Thursday, April 21, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (130)By person wrote:

    Thank you so very much.

  • A former member wrote: This was soft, genuine and graceful. Hopelessly in love (: Great piece!

  • RoseTheBrokenHearted On Monday, April 18, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (130)By person wrote:

    Thank you much! (:

  • Queazenart On Saturday, April 16, 2016, Queazenart (200)By person wrote:

    Oh, God, this poem gives me a feeling like... I don't know how else to describe it but "shitty". Yeah, it gives me a "shitty" feeling. That's NOT to say the poem is shitty- It's actually freakin' fantastic. The image I get while reading it, though, is off this cold, distant faux-lover who can't seem to treat the speaker with the respect and affection they deserve. THAT's why I get a "shitty" feeling from it... And it's really awesome that you were able to conjure that feeling in me.

  • RoseTheBrokenHearted On Saturday, April 16, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (130)By person wrote:

    That is precisely how it is, and it's not that he is a shitty person, but his actions because of someone else is what makes it shitty. But thank you so much for such wonderful feedback!

  • tmanzano On Saturday, April 16, 2016, tmanzano (207)By person wrote:

    Good perspective poetry here and I can feel the subject. The tone is somber and somewhat seductive if that makes sense. I enjoyed this and it kept my attention throughout. Nice work.

  • RoseTheBrokenHearted On Saturday, April 16, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (130)By person wrote:

    It makes perfect sense to me. I am glad you enjoyed! :)

  • A former member wrote: Pretty decent flow. The lines "That's what it feels like, to be in love with you" almost have a singsong feel when I read them.

  • RoseTheBrokenHearted On Saturday, April 16, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (130)By person wrote:

    The singsong feel is actually what I was going for, but thank you much.

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