I built a god

By beamish

I built a god in my garage
Big and shiny with power to spare

I wound him up and put him on the stage to play 

To my dismay the audience all started to pray
Raising hand 
Calling his name

I used a mic and asked them to believe
Give to him freely and great rewards you will receive 

One would have thought I was at a strip bar
$ started to fly
Cash covered the floor 
Belief filled every eye

But then he wound down
God just sat still

I knew it was over and I feared I might get killed 

But no 
They just chanted
Wind him 
Wind him again

Forgive our sins

Write a book - make him legit

It doesn't matter if he's just wire and steel 
We need a God 
We believe he's real 

Wind him fast and make him spin

We will give all our money 
Dedicate our lives
If need we will even die

let him forgive our sins 
Give us something we can

blindly believe in

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Copyright 2016 beamish
Published on Tuesday, June 28, 2016.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: The thing I noticed most was your rhyme scheme and flow. Very engaging. I feel like nothing is lost on the reader, who is shown through steady examples how easily people in this day and age can defy our expectations. The crowd you described reminds me a lot of people who like to discuss politics. Often it's less a discussion and more like a revolving door. Good commentary. Good write.

  • beamish On Thursday, June 30, 2016, beamish (137)By person wrote:

    Apperciate the comments. Thank you

  • A former member wrote: Very well said! It could have easily be a song instead of a poem! Nice!

  • beamish On Wednesday, June 29, 2016, beamish (137)By person wrote:

    Appreciate the comments

  • LovelyUndead On Wednesday, June 29, 2016, LovelyUndead (16)By person wrote:

    There is a lot of meaning here. And I feel it. There's some political (religious) outlook here that makes me think very hard about the world we live in. Great write.

  • beamish On Wednesday, June 29, 2016, beamish (137)By person wrote:

    Thank you. We all need to think and question any belief system pushed at us. I apperciate your comments

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, TropicalSnowstorm (1718)By person wrote:

    That first line, "I built a god in my garage" is so casual and matter-of-fact, which makes it very effective in setting a cool tone for this piece. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • beamish On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, beamish (137)By person wrote:

    A cool tone. I like that. Thank you

  • RoseTheBrokenHearted On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted (133)By person wrote:

    This is such a beautiful piece of work. It is by far my favorite of yours thus far!

  • beamish On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, beamish (137)By person wrote:

    You're comments mean a lot. Thank you. Thanks for reading

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