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I built a god
By beamish
I built a god in my garage
Big and shiny with power to spare
I wound him up and put him on the stage to play
To my dismay the audience all started to pray
Raising hand
Calling his name
I used a mic and asked them to believe
Give to him freely and great rewards you will receive
One would have thought I was at a strip bar
$ started to fly
Cash covered the floor
Belief filled every eye
But then he wound down
God just sat still
I knew it was over and I feared I might get killed
But no
They just chanted
Wind him
Wind him again
Forgive our sins
Write a book - make him legit
It doesn't matter if he's just wire and steel
We need a God
We believe he's real
Wind him fast and make him spin
We will give all our money
Dedicate our lives
If need we will even die
Just
let him forgive our sins
Give us something we can
blindly believe in
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Copyright 2016 beamish
Published on Tuesday, June 28, 2016.
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Comments on "I built a god"
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A former member wrote:
The thing I noticed most was your rhyme scheme and flow. Very engaging. I feel like nothing is lost on the reader, who is shown through steady examples how easily people in this day and age can defy our expectations. The crowd you described reminds me a lot of people who like to discuss politics. Often it's less a discussion and more like a revolving door. Good commentary. Good write.
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On Thursday, June 30, 2016, beamish
(134)
wrote:
Apperciate the comments. Thank you
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A former member wrote:
Very well said! It could have easily be a song instead of a poem! Nice!
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On Wednesday, June 29, 2016, beamish
(134) wrote:
Appreciate the comments
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On Wednesday, June 29, 2016, LovelyUndead
(16) wrote:
There is a lot of meaning here. And I feel it. There's some political (religious) outlook here that makes me think very hard about the world we live in. Great write.
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On Wednesday, June 29, 2016, beamish
(134) wrote:
Thank you. We all need to think and question any belief system pushed at us. I apperciate your comments
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On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
That first line, "I built a god in my garage" is so casual and matter-of-fact, which makes it very effective in setting a cool tone for this piece. Ciao, T/S
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On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, beamish
(134) wrote:
A cool tone. I like that. Thank you
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On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, RoseTheBrokenHearted
(130) wrote:
This is such a beautiful piece of work. It is by far my favorite of yours thus far!
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On Tuesday, June 28, 2016, beamish
(134) wrote:
You're comments mean a lot. Thank you. Thanks for reading
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