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Smell of Rain
By tmanzano
I know it when I look at you
I’m stirring in your sky
thunderbolts rise up within
telling us to come inside
Feel the wind whip up again
drowned out all the chaff
scare the flooded fields of crow
lightning deep in us to crash
I built this bed for us by hand
back when those oaks fell
it washed out all the roads to you
rain soaked sheets of skin avail
I’m not what you want to want
you look amazing in afraid
I will hold you tight this time
just to feel your windows shake
I wish that we could try again
but I can get you back to town
wait and dry out here for you
pray your storm comes back around
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Copyright 2016 tmanzano
Published on Saturday, April 16, 2016.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Author's Note:
desire is intoxicatingComments on "Smell of Rain"
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On Saturday, July 13, 2019, VERITAS OMOIKANE
(24)
wrote:
agreed. desire is indeed intoxicating. especially since we're lustful driven creatures unaware to of our carnal desires. very powerful piece. i myself am a fellow pluviophile. thank you for sharing, i appreciate you.
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On Monday, April 25, 2016, Magdalena
(628) wrote:
Your title made me think of how I smell the rain before it comes... Desire is the catalyst for some great poetry. A passionate stormy piece here, great stuff.
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A former member wrote:
Inspiring poem with a very good structure. Very good!
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On Sunday, April 17, 2016, dwells
(4512) wrote:
A storm of desire always needs a good quenching. Unpredictable and extemporaneous make for some memorable meetings. Enjoyed your soft rhymes and the smell precedes the rainfall curiously - cheers! - Dan
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On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano
(231) wrote:
Even in the comments you have poetry. Thank you Dan.
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A former member wrote:
Incredibly intoxicating♡
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On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano
(231) wrote:
Thank you kindly.
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On Saturday, April 16, 2016, Queazenart
(239) wrote:
It's sort of weird seeing you use rhyme and structure like this, Tman; I've come to expect odd arrangements from you. The power in your syntax and imagery is still here, though, which is what really matters. Awesome piece! It's always a treat reading something you've penned.
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On Saturday, April 16, 2016, tmanzano
(231) wrote:
Thank you Q... I played wit it. But, if you look close I only came close to a rhyme. Not an actual rhyme. I just could not bring myself to do it. The structure is not good, I will admit. But I wanted to see if I could get a Hybrid out of it. Based on the lack of comments I think I may not be very good at it. I really appreciate your kind word bud. Thank you.
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