The Dark, Bottomless Pit of Depression
By NarcissusNarcosis
It started here, it will end here
but it is no perfect circle
just this round room around all your fears
and all the writing on the wall is hurtful...
In a place where suicide contemplates you
and you pretend you don't get the jokes
because there's no point looking amused
when happy words spoken aloud make you choke.
The snake curls around itself cuz it has no companion
wound up in a circle, no end or new beginning...
endless nights of endless nightmares and I feel abandoned
even with the volume off, the sound of despair is Deafening...
Running headfirst through my problems is too much a chore
makes my head grind unbearably with pain
but I'm just dropping ice cubes all along the floor
so I can step in water at the end of the day...
You can 'write off' your troubles
all you want
but your pen will eventually
run dry of ink.............
Comments on "The Dark, Bottomless Pit of Depression"
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A former member wrote:
'It started here / it will end here, but it is no perfect circle . . . just this round room around all of your fear," ringing your neck swiftly as you try to hang up . . . "You can 'write off' your troubles all you want" . . . very telling. Here your pen is, dry of ink again. Why can't you use mechanical lead--reload, erase, and at the end of the day . . . when there are no mistakes, just trace it in ink to save for a rainy day, so the black can bleed out and never the red . . .
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A former member wrote:
This is very expressive. I like it. Good job.
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On Friday, July 19, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
Another classic, I think "but I'm just dropping ice cubes all along the floor so I can step in water at the end of the day..." is my favorite line because it shows that you plan to make it through the day. Ever the optimist, I want you to make it through till something changes and you no longer need to drop ice cubes... - XXOO
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A former member wrote:
The closing lines are what I think about all the time, wondering just how much is left now...great as always :)
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On Thursday, July 18, 2013, FearlessDragon
(137) wrote:
Eye opening and very personal. You are very gifted!
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On Thursday, July 18, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
Heaviness in full volume with a thickness of despair . "Intro lines are powerful. Deeply depressing to say the least;( ~^_^~ xxx
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A former member wrote:
Nicely written!!! I love this." In a place where suicide contemplates you
and you pretend you don't get the jokes
because there's no point looking amused" my favorite lines! this is a favorite