By Strataic


Was Hal-f-

When carousel
Cabinets; whirled
Ferociously around.

A mouse-
Of maggot--butterflies.

It seethes here...

She-- was just-

Rustling, her carrier-bag.

From useable filaments.

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Copyright 2013 Cipher
Published on Friday, May 17, 2013.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cassette On Friday, November 3, 2017, Cassette (1095)By person wrote:

    I actually felt that the hyphens didn't work for me. I found myself over enunciating... like "hal-eff", reading it as two separate words. I feel that there's too many hyphenations. I think the line breaks would be sufficient, sans hyphens.

  • NarcissusNarcosis On Monday, August 5, 2013, NarcissusNarcosis (94)By person wrote:

    Your structuring style lends well to this piece. The hyphenations help accentuate certain parts, 'Hal-f- Torn'...I like it, your writing is interesting and original. Poetic work here, cool post -NN

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