Shiver Written with a Hardwood Floor

By Demosthenes

3.12AM

The little girl sits cold
in the center of the room
She was asked cold
to write a poem
by her friend
She was reminded cold
to make it good
by her friend
She was assured cold
it would occupy an hour
by her friend
But her mind wanders cold
to her friend
Asleep
on the bed.
Her friend is not cold.

3.19AM

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Published on Thursday, July 3, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Shiver Written with a Hardwood Floor"

A former member wrote: really really good there, gave me shivers... good shivers... :D
On Thursday, March 24, 2005, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

Dude, seriusly.. sweet ass kicking poetry.. :)
On Friday, October 8, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (976) wrote:

WOW this was great! exquisite vision... Kya
A former member wrote: Your words paint a picture...well done, my friend.
On Thursday, December 11, 2003, SilentStalker (1047) wrote:

...the repitition only adds to this poem...and I love the image you created with this; very thought proviking indeed... -Darun
On Thursday, September 4, 2003, OLd SouL (717) wrote:

crap, this one rocks too. Damn, guess I have to add you to my favorites now.
On Monday, August 18, 2003, Blood of Winter (296) wrote:

definitely a chilling write.
On Tuesday, July 8, 2003, KittyStryker (710) wrote:

i love this! well done, the repeat of the word cold just creates an icy edge...
A former member wrote: very cool. i felt like i was looking at a timed sequence of snapshots.... and it was chilly.
On Saturday, July 5, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509) wrote:

Interesting!...felt a bit cold though;)~DW~
A former member wrote: Oh dear god this wass awesome...oh my god this was totally....AHHH great
A former member wrote: i must agree: insanity brings out the best in us...great writing
A former member wrote: I'm not possitive... but i think you might be insane... i still liked it though... but, you could be insane
On Thursday, July 3, 2003, manywalks (747) wrote:

Ah, but insanity works so well with this one. ~ mw